Writing Songs

[BabbleOn8806]

I love to write songs and want ya'll's opinions about them
here's the first one called "Lift Up"- what do you think of the words?


I LOOK INTO YOUR EYES. WHAT DO I SEE THERE?
JUST A MERE DISGUISE HIDING PAIN YOU CAN’T BEAR.
LIFT UP…LIFT UP
YOUR EYES AND LOOK TO THE HILLS.

CHORUS

I LIFT UP- MY EYES TO THE HILLS
I LFT UP- MY VOICE TO YOUR EARS
OH LORD, MY REFUGE- THE ONE WHO HEARS MY CALL
MAKER OF HEAVEN- CREATOR OF ALL
I LIFT UP- EVERYTHING TO YOU.

VERSE 2:
GOD WATCHES OVER YOU;
HE SHADES YOU FROM THE SUN.
HE’LL KEEP YOU FROM ALL HARM UNTIL
YOUR TIME ON EARTH IS DONE.
LIFT UP…LIFT UP- YOUR HEART, YOUR SOUL AND YOUR LIFE!

BRIDGE:
OH LORD I KNOW YOU’RE HERE TO STAY
I LIFT UP AND PRAISE YOUR HOLY NAME!

 

[BabbleOn8806]

second one: called "Into Your Heart"
CHORUS:
Let me into your heart. I will show you -show you the way.
Let me into your heart- I know you- I will never go away.
Let me into your heart- my Child- After all,I died for you-
So let me live in your heart and you… will never be alone-
I’ll be in your heart.

VERSE 1:
You know you hear Him knocking-knocking on the door.
You don’t how to greet him, but He’s been there before.
What are you gonna do- leave him in the rain?
You’ve gotta let him in- you’ll never be the same… HE’s sayin’
CHORUS
VERSE2:
You open the door a bit- see him standing there.
He says “Don’t be afraid- You know how much I care!”
Slowly He enters in, takes a look around.
He says “I’ve got work to do in you but your soul is safe and sound”
all cuz he said:
CHORUS

 

[Sleepy Jean]

Very nice! I especially like that first one.

 

[godchick03]

Wow! Those songs are great! You're a good songwriter. I think the first song is beautiful, but the second one is good too.

 

[BabbleOn8806]

thanks i have the music to the first but not the second... what kind of song do you imagine the second one being???

 

[Lions_child]

I really like the first one... most of it flows really well. What sort of song is it?

I like how you've rhymed, but it's not in an odd way... it makes sense to rhyme in the places where you rhyme, which is cool!

 

[godchick03]

I imagine the second one being an upbeat song. You should post more of your songs, i enjoy reading them.

 

[BabbleOn8806]

thanks for your input- i sat down and wrote the first one in about 5 minutes
i was thinking upbeat for the second one too... now gotta work on that
here's my up beat, contemporary song called "Somebody" (you can kinda tell from the words )

SOMEBODY
Verse 1:
I try to tell you but you won’t listen.
I am lost- yeah- I need a friend.
“but what!” (what what!) you say. “what about me?”
“Hey Hey” (hey hey) I say “why you can’t see-
I want the peace that you have… how do I get it?”
Tell me- don’t keep it secret – I can’t forget it (I can’t forget it!)

CHORUS:
Somebody (somebody) tell me what to do- Even though I don’t always listen to you-
Somebody (somebody) show me the way- show me the way so I don’t have to pay
somebody (somebody) help I’m lost- somebody somebody lead me to the cross
Somebody (Somebody) show me that He died- praise His name so he’ll be glorifi-i-i-i-ied
Glorified-Oh-oh-oh-oh…Somebody (somebody) whoa-oh-oh-oh oh!

Verse 2:
So many (so many) say they love God and-
Believe in Him- but I don’t get it!
I can’t (I can’t) yeah I just can’t see why
Nobody (nobody) has told me ‘bout him me yet-
they don’t have time to tell me- about Jesus
I wanna tell them something-my life is on the line yeah! Yeah-eah-eah!

BRIDGE: So here I am… waiting at the door… I need the key- a testimony- it could be yours!

CHORUS
Ending: Whoa-oh-oh-oh.. I need somebody.

i really wish i could like sing this one for you with my friend, cuz it sounds really really cool especially with all the echo and ad-lib parts

 

[BabbleOn8806]

next song is very sweet and private, meant to be sung (maybe by me) on my wedding day- this one includes the chords so you can get a tiny feel for the song

Intro/interlude: C2 C2/Am C2/F G (repeat)
VERSE:
C Am F Gsus G
I used to dream, I used to think, I used to pray about you.
C Am F Gsus G
My only love, the special one, saving myself- for you!
Am Em Am Em
And though it was challenging, now it’s so rewarding
F Em F Gsus G
Here I am and here you are- now we’re two but soon one!
CHORUS:
C Em F G
I am your friend and whatever happens, I’ll be there for you.
C Em F E
I am your love- your close companion- there to see you through,
Am E7 Am E
In whatever lies ahead for us, I’ll be by your side.
F C F G C
I’ll be faithful and loyal…for all time.

VERSE: (SAME AS VS 1)
Do you feel the way I do when I look into your eyes
Everything I’ve ever wanted and now I realize
Hoping and waiting and praying was the master plan
We’ll travel down life’s road together hand in hand…

BRIDGE:
D Em C D
So here’s my heart… saved for you!
D Em C D
Here’s my love…it’s all for you!

A F#m E A - E/G#-F#m-E-BM
I’ve waited for this moment, lived for it all my life_______________
Bm F#m Bm G (KEY CHANGE) A D2
And now I will finally become your wife!
CHORUS II (PLAYED 1 STEP HIGHER)
D F#m G A
You are my friend and whatever happens I’ll be there for you
D F#m G F#
You are my love-my close companion- there to see me through
Bm F7 Bm F#
In whatever lies ahead for us we’ll be side by side
G F#m
We’ll be faithful and loyal…
Bm Asus A
Hand in hand and heart to heart!
D2 A D2 D2/Bm D2/G
For all time… till death do we part…
A D (ARPEGGIO)
I do…
ORDER: INTRO, VERSE1 CHORUS, INTERLUDE2 VERSE2, CHORUS, INTERLUDE 2, BRIDGE, CHORUS2

 

[BabbleOn8806]

"Be Your Rock"

I will never leave you
I'll never let you down
I'll be your friend until the end
and keep you safe and sound

CHORUS:
I'll be your Rock
And I will be your friend
I'll be your Rock
Stickin' with you till the end
All others may move on
And leave you in the dust
But I'll be the one
To pick you up

My mercy is unfailing
My love will always last
So come to me
All you who seek
For hope to hold you fast
(CHORUS)
Just ask for forgiveness
I’ll live in your heart!
My child, I promise you
We will never part!

 

[godchick03]

"Somebody" seems like a cool song. I think it would be better if i heard it though. The love song is very sweet and "Be Your Rock" was good too. You're really good!

 

[yod]

The Dead Sea
© T Pearce 2003

I found a thing just the other day and I needed to throw it away
How can I lose this permanently?
Gonna take it right on down to the Dead Sea
Throw it out in the Dead Sea
While I’m standing at the Dead Sea, I saw a man looking back at me
Could it be the man I was? Or the man that I need to be?
Staring into the Dead Sea
Ain’t it funny how waves can flow?
The heavens pull and the high winds blow
Then somehow we all wind up here
In a place where face our fear
I’m so afraid of the Dead Sea

Don’t know how it got this far,
I was wondering where You are
I was hidden in the Garden well
Hoping that the saints don’t tell on me
And now I find me in the Dead Sea
Nothing lives in the water here, nothing lives anywhere near
So afraid to let it be..and I’m hanging on desparately
Floating out on the Dead Sea
Ain’t it funny how waves can flow?
The heavens pull and the high winds blow
Then somehow we all wind up here
In a place where face our fear
Floating on the Dead Sea

In a place of helplessness the waters moved in a sweet caress
Even though I can’t drink this cup, still a hand is holding me up
I can’t sink in the Dead Sea
Ain’t it funny how waves can flow?
Valley high and the mountains low
Then somehow we all wind up here
In a place where face our fear

And I’m alive on the Dead Sea

 

[rgbivens]

Thats awesome babble! your song lift it reminded me of a song by a band called Thousand Foot Krutch called lift it...its a pretty awesome song my first band did a cover of it and i loved it.

-GB

 

[Marinville288]

Your songs are still good babble! And everyone else's, I love reading other people's music other than mine. Ya'll are all REALLY good songwriters!! Keep up the good work!