will you

[Lasias]

Let me know how u like it
Will you

if you saw me on the street & i needed help what would u do?
Pass me by? I thought u might.
You'll never know if you'll see me again,
even though we see each other every day,
tomorrow isn't granted.
Will u regret today? Will you face tomorrow fresh?
Or will you regret yesterday
& worry about what tomorrow may bring?
Part of living is taking chances,
& you miss 100% of the chance you don't take.
Sometimes you have to jump & hope that someone will catch you.
If you don't you could miss the best things in life.
Don't miss today & don't forget the past, the past makes you who you are.

 

[Lasias]

no 1 likes it?

 

[Lasias]

okay

 

[Lasias]

fine,I'm gonna go cry now jp

 

[katydid1409]

Hey I like it. don't cry.....

 

[fallupchik]

i like it

 

[drumairoxtinez]

I can see what you're saying, but the likely reason people have not responded, is that you could have done well to edit the poem before posting the thing.

For example, you wrote: "if you saw me on the street & i needed help what would u do?"--First of all, you should always write out the words. Instead of '&', write out 'and.' Also, instead of 'u', write out 'you.'

You also wrote: "You'll never know if you'll see me again,/even though we see each other every day,/tomorrow isn't granted."--This is almost like it's no more than a sentence chopped up into partial sentences so as to make a verse.

You could have written it more like:

Don't miss today; don't forget the past--
The past makes you what you are.
What would you do,
Seeing me in the street?
Would you pass me by?
--I thought so.
If again you'll see me,
You will never know;
Take not the morrow for granted,
But take a chance,
Take a look at the passers-by,
And ask yourself for a reply:
Will you see the morrow fresh?
Will you regret, or worry,
Of either today's or tomorrow's events?
One hundred per cent, I say,
Do you miss out on that day
--That day you pass me by.
Take a chance, let hope catch you;
Reach out a hand, let faith hold you;
Jump, if you must--
There's always a-one there to catch you.
If you don't try, won't you be sad?
Would you not have missed out?
How does yesterday change you today?
How does today, change tomorrow?

 

[curlyblue]

I think its a good poem Lasias.

 

[GodFlute2]

Other than the spelling and punctuation issue, it's a great poem.