second incarnation

[Silver Saint]

Soul Rhythm

Black and churning, Fire burning,
Ever twisting, stalwart learning,
Dire pain and silent hurting,
Silver quick and loudly surging.



Blades and blood and bone and fight,
Running, living for the night,
Power calm, and burden now,
Lone and bold to breach new heights.



Soft and wet and warm and hot,
Still and strong: a wanting knot,
Rhythm, hurry, touch and breathe,
Stay your hand, prey, and keep.






This poem was an experiment. I thought to myself 'What would my soul look like if I could see it? How would it make me feel to see it?' I'm very happy with the results. I wanted the rhythm to tell as much about this thing as the words that conform to it. I've posted this one before, but I changed a small bit, and I'd like to see how it is recieved by those who have joined us since then.
Go with God.

I am aware,
Isacc

 

[Quixotic the Pedestrian]

I really like it. This is up there on my top 10 list of what I've read here

 

[delicate_flower]

Ditto.

 

[Silver Saint]

Thank you both for your kind words. I would be interested to see what you could come up with if you tried the same premise.

 

[Quixotic the Pedestrian]

yeah I'm definately up for the challenge. I don't know if I'll keep in the guidelines. I typically find a place to start and then let me mind wonder untill it comes to a decent conclussion. It's ever so difficult for me to know where a poem is going to go, teach, attempt to inspire, before I write it. I dunno, call it the Holy Spirit or something

But this is an idea I've been wanting to pursue.. so you may have just inspired me.. only time will tell of it's beauty (most poems I write end up being scrapped)

 

[delicate_flower]

Hmm... I will try... once I find some time to myself, I will give it a shot.

 

[Quixotic the Pedestrian]

I've slacked too, but I promise inspiration is comming

 

[Soulwings]

I like it a lot...if I tried it would be a miserable failure...but I'll see what I can do.