Down Deep

[keyz]

I just found this poetry forum and I figured I would submit something I did for literature class a couple months ago. Let me know what you think. I've just recently started writing a little more. BTW.. we were studying sonnets at the time so I had to write a sonnet. That's exactly what the format is.. so yeaaaa...


Down Deep

No comprehension of where I’m going,
I walk and strut though a confusing maze;
It is not meant to be of my knowing
Where I will be led to in these fogged days.
Completely distraught and torn I wonder,
What are you doing with this life of mine?
I feel as I am twenty feet under,
But I continue on this winding line.
Scared and shaken I cry out for you now,
All these strange barriers are sent my way.
As I fumble thoughts and feelings I vow,
I’ll still trust you to the end of the day.
Just trust me, and you will find in the end;
I’m all you got, and I will be your friend.

 

[missionarypoet]

Cool- sonnets are hard to write sometimes, but you stuck with the format really well. I also liked the message. Great job!

 

[delicate_flower]

That's pretty good for a sonnet. I wrote a sonnet for Literature class too but mine did not turn out as good as yours.