Feedback, anyone?

[Takando]

I got a strong inspiration to write a certain song. The lyrics part is almost finished, just second verse is missing before I can start work on the melody and actual music to it.
But I would love to hear feedback and thoughts of the lyrics this far. Also in hope it would help to shape the missing second verse i feel bit of unsure how I would write it.


The steps are echoing in a lone room
What was once lively its now gone
Glass embroidered with white Frost
Quiet cold and beauty
An emptiness inside so deep
ooo
The words I remember so well now
The pen is finally put to rest
Signed with hope and certain
Quiet, frail, confident
The letter sealed with memories

Do not hold your tears now,
don't let bitterness stay.
The pain may stay with you,
but it is passing by
Tomorrow is coming, it is in the air.
Though I must be going, I do not say goodbye.

'Cause I know that

One day we will meet again
One day we will laugh again
One day we will hold again
One day we will be listening the raindrops

One day we will stand again
One day we will talk again
One day we will walk hand in hand,
memories carried

(2nd verse)

Do not hold your tears now,
don't let bitterness stay.
The pain may stay with you,
but it is passing by
Tomorrow is coming, it is in the air.
Though I must be going, I do not say goodbye.

'Cause I know that

One day we will meet again
One day we will laugh again
One day we will hold again
One day we will be listening the raindrops

One day we will stand again
One day we will talk again
One day we will walk hand in hand,
memories carried

One day we will see again
One day we will know again
One day we will shine again
One day we will be standing in the light

One day we will rise again
One day we will love again
One day we will be whole again
when the night's gone

 

[Richard T]

Here is my try. Hopefully it will inspire you to finish however you like. Overall, you seem to capture a feeling. In no way do my suggestions mean you are not on a good track already. Likely the music will help direct the words. Jesus rakasta sinua, if i remember to spell that right. God bless!

Do not hold your tears for now,
Help them let go of the bitterness somehow,
The pain may linger for quite some time
But will some day, pass you by.
As hope arises in every heart
So grow it always and let it do its part.

Tomorrow is coming, it's in the air.
It's not naive to say we care
As memories abide,
I will always see your smile
So though I must be going.
I do not say goodbye

A perfect day and we will see again
The clouds will rise but we'll know within
Healing comes and all darkness fades
It is faith and light that will rule the day.