Thoughts about my essay?

[Anonw34457]

Hello, I'm new to this website, so I'm sorry if my formatting is wrong. I have just finished a essay on the Jewish people and how it relates to the Bible, Christ, etc. I was hoping someone could skim it over to make sure there isn't any major flaws in it. Thanks.

 

[SkyWriting]

Hello, I'm new to this website, so I'm sorry if my formatting is wrong. I have just finished a essay on the Jewish people and how it relates to the Bible, Christ, etc. I was hoping someone could skim it over to make sure there isn't any major flaws in it. Thanks.

The intro and conclusions are both wrong. The intro doesn't do what an intro does and the conclusion, the same. Those are major rewrites. I didn't get to the middle.

 

[OldWiseGuy]

You have conflated the house of Judah and the house of Israel. You must keep them separate and distinct. The Jews; the house of Judah; rejected Jesus, so he went to the house of Israel. "I am sent only to the lost sheep of the house of Israel." By this statement it is clear that he knew beforehand that the Jews as a whole would reject him.

See Matthew 4:14-16

 

[Anonw34457]

You have conflated the house of Judah and the house of Israel. You must keep them separate and distinct. The Jews; the house of Judah; rejected Jesus, so he went to the house of Israel. "I am sent only to the lost sheep of the house of Israel." By this statement it is clear that he knew beforehand that the Jews as a whole would reject him.

See Matthew 4:14-16

Thank you. This is exactly the type of advice I want.

 

[OldWiseGuy]

Welcome to the forums! You'll have fun here.

 

[Anonw34457]

Welcome to the forums! You'll have fun here.

This seems like a much better place than Reddit XD

 

[Anonw34457]

Welcome to the forums! You'll have fun here.

I made some revisions to my essay. Hopefully you can tell me what you think. Most revisions were in section II. Thanks.

 

[Anonw34457]

I know there are spelling mistakes, I will fix those later.

 

[RichardMollin]

Overall, it's good, but there are inconsistencies. Writing a good essay takes more practice and perseverance.

 

[MAryM37]

You are great, I personally liked the essay very much))