pooh-etry...

[ghoti]

I'm not much of a poet, but I dawdle. Here's a little something...


ahhH! time to scream...

this world spins around pretty fast -
twurling, balancing, dancing like a top
on the edge of the table,
and you know it never stops.

the music always plays,
and we dance.

like little puppets on a string,
jerked and pulled around
a-shes a-shes
we all fall down.

the music always plays,
and we dance.

dirty socks tumblin' in the wash.
oh, how i feel like one of them,
fighting the waves
only to be drowned again and again.

 

[damaris13]

tbat's pretty good. you have some vivid imagery in there.

 

[oncewaslost]

thanks for sharing! good job

 

[Vixen Evenstar]

w0w

 

[Blessed-one]

oh no, have you been reading Macbeth?

 

[ghoti]

Originally posted by Blessed-one
oh no, have you been reading Macbeth?

Uh... no.  Actually, I've never read Macbeth, why?

 

[Blessed-one]

there's a famous line where it portrays life as a puppet on a stage, and as a flame it is extingushed quickly and "is heard no more".

your poem sounds exactly like the sentiment in Macbeth, dark and pessimistic.

 

[The-Doctor]

"All the worlds a stage and we are but players" I think it went, I like the poem Ghoti! Or as Micheal Frayn put it in his play "noises off"
"bang , your on, bang, you said it, bang your off!"

 

[Blessed-one]

cool, Doctor.