This is a modified sonnet (2x Quatrains and 2x triplets but without real meter)
The point of the poem was to be evocative: to try to bring a feeling of serenity and melancholy.
Some have said I did ok; others not so.
What do you people think?
(and be savage if you like)
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When I was young,
He taught me.
In my dawn,
He fed me.
While I grew,
He'd guide me.
My morning,
He loved me.
The sun is high,
At noons tall peak,
My lessons learned and kept.
I thought about his sacrifice,
A wistful sonnet.
I wept.
The point of the poem was to be evocative: to try to bring a feeling of serenity and melancholy.
Some have said I did ok; others not so.
What do you people think?
(and be savage if you like)
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When I was young,
He taught me.
In my dawn,
He fed me.
While I grew,
He'd guide me.
My morning,
He loved me.
The sun is high,
At noons tall peak,
My lessons learned and kept.
I thought about his sacrifice,
A wistful sonnet.
I wept.