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[Tariel]

I've got a social situation in my story that's been working pretty well. The problem is that I have no idea how realistic it is. Would anybody be willing to look at the situation and let me know what you think?

 

[sunstruckdream]

Sure! I like hearing other people's plots and setups. If you want, PM me...

 

[NeoScribe]

I'll take a whack at it too.

 

[Tariel]

Ok...here's how it works. The story mostly takes place in a country called Ranew. To the average inhabitant, Ranew isn't that exciting a place. I mean, sure they have a history of psychotic queens (in a good way)....but that's about it. However, there is also a race of magic-users living in Ranew. The general population hates them, so just about all of them live in an expansive city known as Everal. Everal is a name of legend among the rest of the population, and is home to all mages, even the ones who reside outside of the city, but it is only exceptionally rare cases that a human actually catches a glimpse of the city; mostly because the mages keep a close guard and they kill any human who gets too close.

There's a little more to it, but that's the basics. What do you think?

 

[sunstruckdream]

Hm. I'm interested in knowing what the 'more to it' is. Clearly it's fantasy, so I'm not sure what sense of 'realistic' you mean. I like the storyline, and it sounds to me like with more details filled into the gaps (why the general population hates the magic users, where this city is, why humans would try to get close to it - stuff I'm sure you've decided about), this could easily make sense and be a very intriguing story. I'm curious already!

And I love your new CF character. Gorgeous!

 

[Cassiopeia]

Ok...here's how it works. The story mostly takes place in a country called Ranew. To the average inhabitant, Ranew isn't that exciting a place. I mean, sure they have a history of psychotic queens (in a good way)....but that's about it. However, there is also a race of magic-users living in Ranew. The general population hates them, so just about all of them live in an expansive city known as Everal. Everal is a name of legend among the rest of the population, and is home to all mages, even the ones who reside outside of the city, but it is only exceptionally rare cases that a human actually catches a glimpse of the city; mostly because the mages keep a close guard and they kill any human who gets too close.

There's a little more to it, but that's the basics. What do you think?

Hi there.

Yes of course it's interesting. One thing you get to do with Fantasy stories is world building. It's your world and as long as you don't go too far out on a limb meaning someone would say,
"well that would never happen" you can do what you want. With the fantasy genre you can do just about anything you want. Just make sure your descriptions are enough to create that world.

I hope that helps.

Casi

 

[Tariel]

Hi there.

Yes of course it's interesting. One thing you get to do with Fantasy stories is world building. It's your world and as long as you don't go too far out on a limb meaning someone would say,
"well that would never happen" you can do what you want. With the fantasy genre you can do just about anything you want. Just make sure your descriptions are enough to create that world.

I hope that helps.

Casi

Honestly....it didn't really help I know plenty about world building, I was looking more for specific comments and criticisms about what I have already done. I mean, sure you can do pretty much whatever you want in fantasy, but it needs some realism, and I don't want to go too far into the story with a system that is either too illogical or confusing.

Oh, and Sun: I'll get you the "more" soon, either here or via PM

 

[Cassiopeia]

Honestly....it didn't really help I know plenty about world building, I was looking more for specific comments and criticisms about what I have already done. I mean, sure you can do pretty much whatever you want in fantasy, but it needs some realism, and I don't want to go too far into the story with a system that is either too illogical or confusing.

Oh, and Sun: I'll get you the "more" soon, either here or via PM

Without the actual writing it is hard to give you a real critique.

 

[sunstruckdream]

Oh, and Sun: I'll get you the "more" soon, either here or via PM

 

[Tariel]

Without the actual writing it is hard to give you a real critique.

Y'know....you are the first person I ever met who said that. I know plenty of people who can tear works to bits with criticism without seeing a single printed word. I also know that I don't have enough of the actual writing for this bit to come through....oh well. Whatever

 

[Cassiopeia]

Y'know....you are the first person I ever met who said that. I know plenty of people who can tear works to bits with criticism without seeing a single printed word. I also know that I don't have enough of the actual writing for this bit to come through....oh well. Whatever

Perhaps they are tearing to bits your ideas. If all you want is a comment on your ideas that is one thing. But I can't offer an opinion on your work without seeing it.

It's fine that you only want to put forth the idea. Good luck.

 

[sunstruckdream]

I think Tariel meant she wanted an opinion on her overarching idea. I could be wrong, though...that's just the impression I was under.

 

[Tariel]

I think Tariel meant she wanted an opinion on her overarching idea. I could be wrong, though...that's just the impression I was under.

yeah....the idea is what I am wondering about.

 

[MckDawg04]

The idea sounds great to me. I'd be interested to read more about it.

Good luck and keep us up to date

 

[Tariel]

The idea sounds great to me. I'd be interested to read more about it.

Good luck and keep us up to date

Thanks. I will