Hook Me.

[athenken]

That's quite good, intriguing even....

I live to intrigue.

 

[brinny]

hahaaaa it worked

 

[motherprayer]

Mine didn't hook wah lol

 

[athenken]

On a somewhat related topic, who here would be interested in a story, or series of stories, based on a character similar to Horatio Hornblower or Jack Aubrey, but based in the early American Navy.

This is a project I am seriously considering which I will be including in a larger project.

 

[brinny]

On a somewhat related topic, who here would be interested in a story, or series of stories, based on a character similar to Horatio Hornblower or Jack Aubrey, but based in the early American Navy.

This is a project I am seriously considering which I will be including in a larger project.

i would be interested, but only cuz you'd be writing it. Yer good.

 

[brinny]

She worked to juggle her stroller, baby bag, and two daughters as she stepped off of the bus. Her whole life had changed forever. God had told her what she needed to do, and yet she still didn't feel as though she had the strength...

i likes it....know why? cuz i can relate....but there's not enough of the blood swaet and tears this kind of struggle generates in yer words, luv.....c'mon, have yu been there? it generates agonizations in parts of ones soul one never suspected was there......from the depths of a struggling soul comes genius, but only if it finds expression....write from her perspective (the one struggling) not from an "observer" standpoint. "Be" her.

 

[briareos]

Songs forgotten,
Songs in sacred silence,

Into darkness the tall rider went,
Where Elendar lies we do not know,
Where he went no brave heart will go,

Into that dark place his star fell,
Songs of dark days,
The old will not tell,

On sad dark hills our hearts were broken,
Elendar where do you dwell,
The books of telling will never be opened

Elendar where do you dwell,
Upon the cry of birds over the waters of the west you did not come,
For the answer of your home our hearts we would sell,
With the chill wind of the east you did not follow,

Upon dark evil hills the tall rider fell,
Under those evil days our hope and love was swallowed

 

[brinny]

Songs forgotten,
Songs in sacred silence,

Into darkness the tall rider went,
Where Elendar lies we do not know,
Where he went no brave heart will go,

Into that dark place his star fell,
Songs of dark days,
The old will not tell,

On sad dark hills our hearts were broken,
Elendar where do you dwell,
The books of telling will never be opened

Elendar where do you dwell,
Upon the cry of birds over the waters of the west you did not come,
For the answer of your home our hearts we would sell,
With the chill wind of the east you did not follow,

Upon dark evil hills the tall rider fell,
Under those evil days our hope and love was swallowed

superb, sir.

what visualization would you add, if you were of a mind to do so?

 

[saffron park]

Songs forgotten,
Songs in sacred silence,

Into darkness the tall rider went,
Where Elendar lies we do not know,
Where he went no brave heart will go,

Into that dark place his star fell,
Songs of dark days,
The old will not tell,

On sad dark hills our hearts were broken,
Elendar where do you dwell,
The books of telling will never be opened

Elendar where do you dwell,
Upon the cry of birds over the waters of the west you did not come,
For the answer of your home our hearts we would sell,
With the chill wind of the east you did not follow,

Upon dark evil hills the tall rider fell,
Under those evil days our hope and love was swallowed

Been reading a lot of Tolkien lately?

 

[briareos]

absolutely!

 

[briareos]

superb, sir.

what visualization would you add, if you were of a mind to do so?

I don't know... I have a myriad of images and I don't really know where to find ones that look like them.

 

[brinny]

I don't know... I have a myriad of images and I don't really know where to find ones that look like them.

take a chance on one.....it begs it....

 

[briareos]

.

 

[brinny]

Whoa, that's pretty awesome.

 

[briareos]

hehe... you saw it too soon! I didn't like them.

 

[brinny]

you didn't?

 

[briareos]

... i give up! I don't know

 

[brinny]

keep your eyes open.....how does the poem make you feel? Is there a "heaviness" to it?

 

[Ronald]

Can you imagine, 144,000 Jews blinded from birth, spontaneously saw the light of Jesus Christ descending on the clouds and believed.

 

[briareos]

Brinny

I know exactly how I feel, dark, death, lonely, despair, loss, sadness, wonder, sacred, hushed, silence, all of these things... I just don't see a pic that shows it well.

Why don't you find a picture for me and tell me why you chose it.

This is a better way to judge how good I am at impressing my thoughts and feelings onto others through writing