Hook me in 20 words or less

sunstruckdream · Mar 4, 2008

Christianfantasy said:
OMC [Oh my cow] Sunstruck--that's hysterically funny! I'm still laughing! GOOD one! [It sounds like a good story, too. The hook is fantastic, anyway.]

Thanks! That's one of my favorite shorts

Christianfantasy · Mar 9, 2008

Not really a new post, but pertinent. Since Ive been back, Ive been reading backward on this thread, and trying to catch up. Here are two thoughts that have emerged.

One: Sillyseth, you took my opener and elaborated on it. That is Such a compliment, and I really appreciate it.

Two, Darkseid, if you are still reading this thread, has anyone ever suggested that you should be a writer. Oh wait.

Lindon Tinuviel · Mar 9, 2008

Tariel said:
"Dying barefoot will not be permitted." I stared at the sign, wondering what it was trying to say.

They say that life imitates art:

Cemetery full, mayor tells locals not to die

In an ordinance posted in the council offices, Mayor Gerard Lalanne told the 260 residents of the village of Sarpourenx that "all persons not having a plot in the cemetery and wishing to be buried in Sarpourenx are forbidden from dying in the parish."

It added: "Offenders will be severely punished."

Source

happiebunnie1313 · Mar 10, 2008

She stared blankly into the bathroom mirror at herself. "I don't even know who I am anymore." she cried.

Brynwizard · Mar 22, 2008

And now, for a little alliteration:

He looked like a ragged, penniless street-person. Imagine my shock when he turned out to be an intergalactic time-traveling trillionaire.

Worddancer · Mar 24, 2008

The unfamiliarity of the throaty, threatening, deeply rumbled growl behind me brings me to a full and prudent halt.

Lessien · Mar 25, 2008

I stared at the Valentine's Day card of two penguins holding hands. "Why can't that be me?" I wondered aloud.

sunstruckdream · Mar 25, 2008

I couldn't help but balk at the Valentine before me. Penguins didn't have hands. Hallmark had officially lost it

Lessien · Mar 25, 2008

Two lost penguins, holding hands. How cute can you get?

(You can do it, so can I...)

blagoslovite · Mar 26, 2008

wow, these are good! I am going to try

I looked down at the ground, observing my own motionless body and unseeing eyes. This could not possibly be good.

_Zap_ · Apr 8, 2008

[FONT=&quot]There were many thoughts that I expected would flash before my eyes in the moments before my death. You can imagine my surprise when the only one that popped up was the singles ad I placed on lovefinders.com.

Ok, so it's a little longer then twenty words. What can I say, I like to bend rules.
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Inkachu · Apr 12, 2008

Wooo, now this is fun! I'm great at this stuff: flashing a quick scene that grabs attention. It's making it into a whole novel that I hate, lol. OK, let me see...

"She stood in the mist of the battlefield. Dark rain fell, hard and icy. Nothing stirred. Broken bodies, armour, helms, here and there a spear poked skyward from the carnage."

Whew, 30 words exactly lol.

Inkachu · Apr 12, 2008

"I stepped from the shower and my breath choked within my throat. On the mirror, the letters "NED" had been swiped amid the damp condensation. I wasn't alone."

Inkachu · Apr 12, 2008

Christianfantasy - Don't be hesitant, that's a great one!!

I hit "quick quote", but it didn't do it...*kick*

Dahlia1 · Apr 15, 2008

"His startling blue eyes were the first thing I noticed about him. Little did I know that they would be staring at my bare skin only a month later."

eep! More than 20! Oh wells. =^.^=

Lessien · Apr 16, 2008

"You're a beautiful liar, Peggy Sue."

sunstruckdream · Apr 16, 2008

Are you familiar with the rubber pencil?

(One of my openers for a prologue.)

Christianfantasy · Apr 17, 2008

Hi, AlleyCatPurrrrs! Thanks for that nice thing you said about my last entry! All these openers just keep getting better and better, imho. I enjoy reading them so much! It would be a crime, in some cases, if they weren't made into openers for actual stories. Especially that one you wrote about the name 'Ned' being written on the shower mirror. Spooky!!!

Here are two more for me:

Reese picked up the phone and heard the familiar voice of his Uncle Colin. The problem being, his uncle had died in a house fire five years before.

By noon Kurt was convinced the only thing that could make his day worse would be a meteor slamming into his house. Looking up, he saw it coming.

Dahlia1 · Apr 17, 2008

"What's wrong?" he asked. "You've always been a risk-taker." He was right, but losing my daughter was one risk I would never take.

Inkachu · Apr 17, 2008

Daisy had been dead for years. But suddenly, a black dog ran by the window. My mother turned to me and said, "Go check the grave."

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