- Mar 23, 2004
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Tell me what you think of this exerpt from my story that I'm writing if you want to read the rest of it that I have so far (four to five chapters) PM me anyhow tell me what you think of this. Thanks bye
Gem's first thought was that her dad had followed her and she was about to be killed. She didn't know what to do except run faster. So she ran, with all her might. Until she tripped over a large stone and sprained her ankle. She plopped to the ground half out of her pain and half out of taking her last few breaths. She could only hope that her dad would pass her and not see her. Maybe if she...
A noise! A voice!She spun around! But what she saw wasn't her dad but a tall young man who looked about 17 or 18.
"Are you alright," He asked.
"Y...e...s I am thank-you."
"I didn't mean to scare you. You see my car broke down up on I 89 and well I have to get back to Texas and..."
That's all she heard. Her mind was reeling. Before her was standing the guy she had always dreamed about meeting. He was nice,hot, hot and did she meantion hot? She was in love and she didn't even know his name!
Maybe I should run through the woods more often Gem thought.
The guy appeared frazzeled.
"What's wrong", Gem asked half way still day dreaming.
'Well you see that's the part that confuses me. I was just driving to UCLA and my parents were with me. My dad in the front seat sitting next to me talking my mom in the back seat humming and I turned for a second because a dog was in the middle of the road and didn't want to hit him and when I turned back around they were gone! My parents had just up and disappeared! Leavaing nothing but a pile of their clothes and jewerly on the seats! My mom had been telling me something like this would happen but I never really thought it would really happen. I think it was called the uh.... what was it called," he paused for a moment to get his bearings straight.
"Oh yeah now I remember the Rapture when all the christians get taken to be with Jesus."
The Rapture- yeah her mom had talked about that before. She just thought her mom had gone crazy. But could it have really happened? She had to go home and check.
"It may have just been a coincidence. You know... I highly doubt that dead man Jesus is ever coming back."
"Maybe....I'm not too sure though I just wish I knew someone whose family was "saved" and I could go there and check."
"My mom was," Gem paused a second.
"But she may already be dead," Gem added sadly.
"What happened? And is your house far from here?"
Gem told Aaron all about what had happened in her life but conveniently left out that she was a movie star.
"I'm so sorry. Your father sounds like a sick man, sorry but he does."
"He is, I just wish I could see my mom again. Anyhow what's your name?"
"Aaron and yours?"
Gem didn't want to tell him who she was so she made up a name.
"Jessica. Nice to meet you Aaron."
The next hour and a half on the way back to Gem's house Aaron and Gem got to know each other a lot. Once they got to Gem's house Gem ran to make sure her mom was alright. She was sure Aaron could protect her if her dad was there so she wasn't at all scared to go inside. She just was nervous that she'd see her mom laying on the floor caked in blood and dead. After she walked through the parlor Gem became really quiet.
"You know Jessica this house is amazing! It looks just like a house I saw on the show Lifestyles of the Rich and Famous. The house belonged to Gem Lynne Lavista."
"Oh you follow Gem Lavista? What do you think of her?"
"Well, you know I'm not much of a star follower but I'm a journalist
Gem's first thought was that her dad had followed her and she was about to be killed. She didn't know what to do except run faster. So she ran, with all her might. Until she tripped over a large stone and sprained her ankle. She plopped to the ground half out of her pain and half out of taking her last few breaths. She could only hope that her dad would pass her and not see her. Maybe if she...
A noise! A voice!She spun around! But what she saw wasn't her dad but a tall young man who looked about 17 or 18.
"Are you alright," He asked.
"Y...e...s I am thank-you."
"I didn't mean to scare you. You see my car broke down up on I 89 and well I have to get back to Texas and..."
That's all she heard. Her mind was reeling. Before her was standing the guy she had always dreamed about meeting. He was nice,hot, hot and did she meantion hot? She was in love and she didn't even know his name!
Maybe I should run through the woods more often Gem thought.
The guy appeared frazzeled.
"What's wrong", Gem asked half way still day dreaming.
'Well you see that's the part that confuses me. I was just driving to UCLA and my parents were with me. My dad in the front seat sitting next to me talking my mom in the back seat humming and I turned for a second because a dog was in the middle of the road and didn't want to hit him and when I turned back around they were gone! My parents had just up and disappeared! Leavaing nothing but a pile of their clothes and jewerly on the seats! My mom had been telling me something like this would happen but I never really thought it would really happen. I think it was called the uh.... what was it called," he paused for a moment to get his bearings straight.
"Oh yeah now I remember the Rapture when all the christians get taken to be with Jesus."
The Rapture- yeah her mom had talked about that before. She just thought her mom had gone crazy. But could it have really happened? She had to go home and check.
"It may have just been a coincidence. You know... I highly doubt that dead man Jesus is ever coming back."
"Maybe....I'm not too sure though I just wish I knew someone whose family was "saved" and I could go there and check."
"My mom was," Gem paused a second.
"But she may already be dead," Gem added sadly.
"What happened? And is your house far from here?"
Gem told Aaron all about what had happened in her life but conveniently left out that she was a movie star.
"I'm so sorry. Your father sounds like a sick man, sorry but he does."
"He is, I just wish I could see my mom again. Anyhow what's your name?"
"Aaron and yours?"
Gem didn't want to tell him who she was so she made up a name.
"Jessica. Nice to meet you Aaron."
The next hour and a half on the way back to Gem's house Aaron and Gem got to know each other a lot. Once they got to Gem's house Gem ran to make sure her mom was alright. She was sure Aaron could protect her if her dad was there so she wasn't at all scared to go inside. She just was nervous that she'd see her mom laying on the floor caked in blood and dead. After she walked through the parlor Gem became really quiet.
"You know Jessica this house is amazing! It looks just like a house I saw on the show Lifestyles of the Rich and Famous. The house belonged to Gem Lynne Lavista."
"Oh you follow Gem Lavista? What do you think of her?"
"Well, you know I'm not much of a star follower but I'm a journalist
