Faeries

[Silent_J]

Smiling at the daisies
Floating with the breeze
Kissing the morning dew
Waving to the daffodils
Alighting on a dandelion
Hiding under a mushroom
Dancing on sunbeams
Playing with caterpillars
Swinging on ivy
Waking the Morning glory
Tasting flower's nectar
Chasing the butterflies

Wings fluttering
Eyes glittering
Laugh tinkling

Faeries

 

[writer4him]

I like it i just have a question do you want any sort of tips or did you just post it to post it?

 

[Silent_J]

I just posted it to post it, and to see some feedback, like, what did make you think about, and stuff like that.


I don't mind a little constructive critizism (sp?) tho.

 

[writer4him]

okay well like said i do like it's in a sense pretty but it seems that for it to really convey meaning it would need to be more than just a list of things faries do.
God Bless

 

[Silent_J]

No, no, no. It's not MEANT to be a list. I'm trying to convey the sense of faerie by writing what they do. what they do is what they ARE.