I noticed no one had commented on your efforts and wanted to offer my brief observations as a form of encouragement. I have read only a small portion of the work, but these thoughts may be of use to you.
First, the a considerable strength in what you have written is that it is clear and your argument is developed in a logical fashion. At least in the early pages there is no rambling, non sequiturs, or wooly thinking.
I've picked out a couple of instances where I think you have been verbose. If you tighten up such instances it will further strengthen the clarity and flow of the book. I have entered your words within quotation marks and my suggested amendments in italics.
"So basically that broken down means that God has before creation chosen a select group for salvation, and a select group for damnation."
That means that God has before creation chosen a select group for salvation, and a select group for damnation.
"I would like to suggest each of us is born in a state of the unknown, we don’t know how to be saved, and we don’t know what God requires."
I suggest each of us is born in a state of the unknown, we don’t know how to be saved, and we don’t know what God requires.
Or even better: Each of us is born in a state of the unknown, we don’t know how to be saved, and we don’t know what God requires.
"We have seen some of the perceived disadvantages of Calvinism, now we will move to the argument for free will as found in scripture, and the Early Church."
We move from the perceived disadvantages of Calvinism to the argument for free will as found in scripture and the Early Church.
I wish you well in your endeavour.
