working on a series need some feedback

[TeenageKiddo]

hey, im writing a series "bible by topic", current topic is life and i want some feedback on the structure and writing just to make sure its clear but interesting. heres the first page of the book. Feel free to leave a reply if you want a copy of it when its finished, its free and an ebook so anyone can have it

Bible by topic – Life
Intro
welcome to bible by topic. A series of books dedicated to providing useful and meaningful insight into the bible on a specific topic. In this book I will be writing about life and what the bible says about your life with God. It will mostly be focused on the path God has set out for you, which is an amazing one. There is a beautiful poem which will sum up your walk with god, “Footprints in the Sand”. An amazing and perfect view of Gods love and care. Well worth a read.

God's path for you
God has a plan and a use for every single one of us, you, me, and the guy beside you at the bus stop this morning. When you give your life to God, he rewards you with a good life. He takes your sin and gives you peace, in the dark he provides light, he walks with you in the good and carries you through the hardest of times.

To start this off one of my favourite and also the second most read verse in the bible Jeremiah 29:11
“I say this because I know what I am planning for you,” says the Lord. “I have good plans for you, not plans to hurt you. I will give you hope and a good future.”(NCV)

Its amazing how for each of the 7 billion people, that’s seven with nine zeros after it, God has a unique and perfect plan for each of them. God has a life he planned for you, before you were even born. A good plan for each and everyone of us. From birth God has searched for you, if he has not yet found you he still is still searching for you.

On a bit of a tangent here is a quick look back at my life and struggles before I met god. Skip this bit if it does not interest you but it might help you relate. Before I met God and got saved I was probably one of the biggest good for nothings you could have ever met. I was caught up in the wrong. I got caught up in drugs, 5 or 6 days every week would be little more than a few memories of me buying or preparing my drugs. Days on end would pass and it was like having a fast forward button pressed continuously on my life, it was waiting and like the sand in an hour glass it was running out, it needed to be turned around and given a fresh start. I used to be very smart, amazing with numbers, really productive and dedicated. I got into secondary school with an A grade. Sailed through most of my years at school until I was 15 and started using drugs. After a year and a half I found God. I was saved and my hour glass was flipped giving me a fresh start without my chemical man made addictions. I will never be the guy I was, but I don't want to be, cause in my walk with god, I know he doesn’t want perfection, crystal clear honest lives, he wants my life and all the dirt and imperfections it contains. He has a plan for me, to use my imperfections and dirt to improve my life not to tarnish it. I have saw this in the past many times, had I have not done what I did, I would have not been able to do half the amazing things or helped as many people as I have. God took my wasted life and made it work.​

 

[SepiaAndDust]

You might resist the temptation to center your actual manuscript.

 

[TeenageKiddo]

the original is not centred. i just did i to differentiate between me talking and the manuscript. quotes are also indented and in italics

 

[fleamailman]

"...well evidently you're explanation part seemed even better than your manuscript there..." ventured the goblin never one to critic much anyway, but than confiding "...well, I guess writing is different things to different people now, and where in its continued practice, that of posting while adding a picture to each post then, three things will occur within you I promise, you'll gain a writer's way with words, an illustrator's eye, and a shared life, however, much like when you took drugs back then, what you do now will do you back too, so this writing lark is not something to be taken lightly now, it too is mind altering then...", the goblin looked down at his hands, and then back at teenagekiddo, sighing "...no, the reader usually moves on at some point yet the writer is not so lucky here, for he remains with that shared life within his head still, which can be a bit like a bad trip at times, one with no off-switch neither, for what you write writes you back again and again and again, so be careful how you proceed is all I'm saying..."

 

[FutureAndAHope]

Sounds good so far ... keep it coming.