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[delicate_flower]

Above my head moonlight fades to dust
I feel cold starlight coarsely kiss my cheek
The smoke rises to deepen my somber days
Once more I must watch the sour night weep

The dark slowly flutters before my eyes
I hear the whisper of brooding dawn call
My heart sinks beyond the recognition of hope
In my mind I wonder if I really have to fall

The ink from my pen sinks through the paper
The words leak out from the drunken spill
Tears from my heart ache towards the sky
I open the bottle for another pill

Once again my hope will never be restored
Once again I realize there is something to fear
Once again the pain in my chest is taking over
Once again my mind will never be clear

Here I sit alone with a deadened heart’s sigh
I stare into space wanting another chance
But never will I see the awakening of life
For I’m forever caught in woe’s brutal dance


*Suggestions for a title are greatly appreciated, thanks.

 

[Silver Saint]

I like it. The wording is cryptic and deep. The symbolism seems to flow as well. If you are like me, naming a work is every bit as hard as writing it. I'm still not very good at doing it for my own works, but perhaps I may benefit yours.
When I finished your poem, the one word that came to me was 'Gravity'. I've tried to come up with something better, but it seems to fit. I may be off, but I hope I've helped.
Go with God.

I am aware,
Isacc

 

[delicate_flower]

Silver, thanks for your suggestion. Now that I read my poem over again, I realize that the name 'Gravity' does fit... Hmm, I'll have to think it over. But thanks for the suggestion. Thanks for reading.

 

[Quixotic the Pedestrian]

hehe, you know delicate flower, your signature is the only one with a scroll bar

 

[delicate_flower]

Hmm, I see that you don't have a signature... I wonder why that is...?

 

[RJHarmony84]

How about "spun gravity"? like spun silk, but it's gravitiy...you knew that, lol. Anyway, I like it. it's not my style exactly, but you're not me, and I recognise that it's good anyway. Keep up the good work...but try not to be so depressed in real life!

 

[RJHarmony84]

ps..I LOVE your first 2 lines...really grabs you!

 

[LunaLee]

That was beautiful, flower, really . . . just awesome. It reminds me of my style of writing, I write about the night and in that same rhyme scheme often.
Very deep, it draws you into the words so well you can't help but read it. Keep it up.

 

[Quixotic the Pedestrian]

grrr..

okok, I'll make a signature --- and you'll like it too!

 

[Quixotic the Pedestrian]

awww.. apparantly I need 50 blessing points to change my signature. You'll have to wait on it then.

 

[delicate_flower]

Okay... I bless you with a 100...

I was going to bless you today anyway; you're such a cool guy.

 

[Silver Saint]

You know, Flower, I may just have to marry you. You're the only girl I've ever met that's not only known of, but liked Melfina's song. I sing it to myself all the time. What are the odds.

I am aware,
Isacc

 

[delicate_flower]

You know, Flower, I may just have to marry you. You're the only girl I've ever met that's not only known of, but liked Melfina's song. I sing it to myself all the time. What are the odds.

I am aware,
Isacc

Lol, I love the song. Sometimes I like to play it on my acoustic, I love to sing it too... I'm surprised someone actually recognized it. That is amazing, hehe.

 

[Silver Saint]

Is that to say that you like anime as well? Or did you just hear it once and enjoy it?

 

[delicate_flower]

I love anime. And I take it you do too...?

 

[Quixotic the Pedestrian]

please leaving the making out part to romantic lake lots and drive in movies


-- ok this isn't the quote I was looking for, but I like it a lot too!

 

[delicate_flower]

please leaving the making out part to romantic lake lots and drive in movies


-- ok this isn't the quote I was looking for, but I like it a lot too!

Lol, .

Yep, you're right, I love your signature.