Transition-y type problem

[xlolokinsx]

I love writing, and I'm working writing a fantasy story on this great idea I have. My only problems is switching scenes smoothly, and making time progress, so I have a ton of page breaks, and it's really choppy.

How can I do this better?

 

[Tariel]

Fantasy stories can afford to be a bit choppier than most, I've found. But still...you want a degree of smoothness, to be sure. I....sorry. Smoothness is difficult to teach. Write it with all it's choppiness, and the look back and work on the transitions...that's all I can say.

 

[MrBF1V3]

The following is IMHO ...

Your story might appear to be choppy if the scenes are too many and too short. It's okay to have short scenes at times, but all the time for no reason can, well, yeah, look bad.

Perhaps you are writing too many scenes which have one purpose, you fill that purpose and move on. First--hide the purpose of your scenes. Don't proclaim to the reader; "I'm writing a scene to introduce Robin, the boy wonder." ...and then jump to something else. Give the reader time to climb into the action, add some dimension with description. Second-- multipurpose your scenes. Have two or three purposes, to introduce the boy wonder, show how full of angst he is, and show how much he wants to steal the batmobile, although he doesn't know how much trouble it will cause because of what's going on across town at this very moment... (Well, you know what I mean.)

Anyway, try those things.

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