The Wind

[hardcoreGL1229]

The moon shines bright through my
bedroom window
The wind howls
The trees tap my window desperately trying
to get my attention
The cool brist air seeps through and a chill
slyly rolls up my spine
I pull the covers up over my head shaking
from the cool air
A poster falls to the floor and I jump nearly
falling off my bed
The wind grows stronger
The leaves rustle on the ground outside
I rest my head on my pillow and close my
eyes
I fall asleep to the music of the wind.

 

[marshallII]

It's good and creative writing should make us feel every word.You did that.
Although,it didn't run together in rhyme it still was a joy to read.
I should post some of my thoughts in poem but maybe another time..I'm too critical of myself.

 

[hardcoreGL1229]

I'm sure it would be fine...you are always your toughest critic. Plus, it wasn't meant to rhyme, but thanks it means a lot...

 

[marshallII]

Yea,I know. I always have this thought though to have it run together flowing with rhyme makes it more creative.
I'm just getting started with prose and poetry. I'll post some stuff sometime.
maybe

 

[hardcoreGL1229]

Come on you can do it...infact if you do I'll post one of mine that I critique myself on too hard. It's good to get stuff out there. It's always better than keeping it in.

 

[marshallII]

It's scary. You open yourself to comments that you might not want to
hear! I will,I'm feeling newborn here still. Not everyone has been so kind.

 

[hardcoreGL1229]

The first time is always the worst, and you learn to ignore people. Let them say what they have to, but don't listen to them. If you feel good about what you wrote then that is all that matters.

 

[SwtRose]

Beautifully written. Wonderful use of imagery.

 

[*BurningHeart*]

i just enjoy reading it hard!

 

[Abruer17]

righteous poem