poem - feedback welcome

[faiththatbreathes]

this is something i dreamed up, on the spot, for poetry. com. what, exactly, is their rep for poetry? pathetic? next year, i'll see if i can think up something they WON'T take.

also, i'm working on a loooong Christian poem, and I'd like some ideas as to where to submit it. any ideas?

(c) Lorinda Loucks (it got published. *cracks up*)

The Other Theory

The ways that wend the world by night,

And chisel moonbeams in the dark -

Like sculptor intrigued by works of light,

When all he knows lies black and stark -

Are not in nature like the roads,

Which, golden, lead one by the hand

Towards weary ways, unending loads;

Instead, traversing freer land

And, beckoning dreamless masses near,

Give muses glimpse of something sweet,

The freedom caught by dewdrop’s tear,

Under unending skies to meet

With destiny’s imagined touch

Upon the night-cooled sleeper now,

And sighs like one who’s suffered much;

The mist of fate lies on his brow,

To be dispersed at dawn’s first gleam -

Disturb the dreamer from the dream.

 

[katelyn]

I think the main goal of poetry.com is to get aspiring poets to buy the books they get published in for themselves and their friends and family. I have two poems published through them, but am holding out on buying anything from them. Now if I were to actually win or even place in one of their poetry contests, I might reconsider.

Still, getting published by poetry.com can't hurt, I figure.