Open Your Eyes

[LiberatedChick]

Open your eyes
You will see
The beautiful things
They are me

I am the soil
The warm earth on the ground
I may not be here
But I'm always around

I am the trees
Reaching for the sky
Whilst they are there
You need not cry

I am the grass
That softens your steps
In my heart
You will be kept

I am the birds
I make music for your ears
Sit back and remember
All those happy years.

I am the thunder
The hail the rain
It may seem frightening
But I feel your pain

I may have gone
And sad you may be
Just open your eyes
And you'll see me

By Starelda

 

[Silver Saint]

Simple, and that's not a bad thing. The lack of punctuation does bring it down in my oppinion, but that's easily enough done. Good Job.
Go with God.



I am aware,
Isacc

 

[LiberatedChick]

Yes well I don't care to think about punctuation much when I'm writing poems as I grieve. But it's easily put in afterwards.

 

[Olga]

Never stop writing poems cos it`s the way G-d can speak through you. Well, but I don`t think it`s the reason to grieve

 

[Quixotic the Pedestrian]

poetry doesn't need punctuation.

good poem