Hey

this is an exerpt from a monoluge delivered by Damaris to herself while looking at her refelction....it is VERY rough as there is no stage directions or even alot of editing...it is only a random section of the play...but any constructive criticism would be Great! thanks.
I see my-self.
And in the clear, still pool,
My body is strong, the skin on my face seems to hold
an un-deniable proof of my existence
An agonizing paradox when held against the translucency
of my soul.
My broad shoulders, my steady hands.....LIARS!
Why do you not appear, disfigured, and maimed!
Why does the skin not hang off the frame of my hands in ghastly shreds!
Why do my shoulders not sag grotesquely twisted and sallow!
It is as though you mock my pain...telling me that all I feel is a lie,
Your beautiful configurations Arguing viciously against my inward agony
Why do you not show the signs of my Death!
(raises knife as though to cut away at her flesh, then
slowly lowers it again.)
And yet I submit my-self to your Authority, For the sake of my existence
I too will believe your lies...(smiles)... So lie well.