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[dawnsday]

All my world is falling and for your hands I’m calling
To save me and forgive the choices made in vain
All my words are shaken as I stand before you breaking
down to the thick of my sin, transparent here, the state I’m in
I am nothing but a nail to pierce your wrists without fail
All I try will not suffice for I’ve not felt your sacrifice

all my prayers are broken
all my dreams are hopless
finally you find me here
I am on my knees
I am on my knees
I am on my knees

AllI habor is this hate, all I long is to escape
I cried so many times before then turned just as you reached my door
I am less the worth this time yet you have promised you are mine
take it all without defense whether peace or be a lifelong test
I can’t walk my road alone lead me where you say I’ll go
All I am and all I know take it all take it all and I will go your way

all my prayers are all broken
all my dreams are hopeless
Ifinally you find me here
I am on my knees
I am on my knees
I am on my knees

All my pride take this shame
All my hate take this shame
All my lust take this shame
All my greed take this shame
All my blood take this pain
All my tears take this pain
All my wounds take this pain
All my weakness take my pain
All my life take my shame
All my life take my joy
All my life take my dreams
All my life take my pain
All my world take it now
All my world shake it down
All my world build it up
All my world is all your love
take it now, take it now, take it now and grant me life
I am on my knees
What my life has cost was drawn upon your cross
and my prayers are all broken
my dreams are hopeless and
I am on my knees.

 

[fisherman2]

'too long make it shorter