Journey - Poem, please comment

[BohemianChris]

Life ending atmosphere
electric waves flowing.

I can see it up ahead,
a little lighthouse.

Fighting with my bag
to stay to my shoulder.

The current of the wind
I am riding, make for beautiful love.

The sea and all its inconsistencies
form a perfect crystal.

For now, I am heading
to more pristine shores.

 

[dustyxxxx]

Nicely done!! The imagery was wonderful!! I could 'see' the lighthouse and almost hear the ocean! There are some dynamite poets here!! Bravo!
Dusty

 

[BohemianChris]

Thank you.

Best,
Chris

 

[writer4him]

wow i really liked that it was great i could also see the lighthouse and i could hear the waves. Ironicly i'm also lisatening to a song called "the Storm is Over Now." hmmm

 

[BohemianChris]

Thanks.

Best,
Chris

 

[fallupchik]

i like it , it painted a picture