Hook me in 20 words or less

It’s been a while since I’ve posted, and I hadn’t even caught up with the thread until this evening. There were SO many good lines, it was hard to pick some out to comment on. If I didn’t pick yours, it’s mainly because I don’t have all that much time at the moment, and I could only comment specifically on a few.

Anyway, here goes.


Twich:

"The last human ever to be born on the Planet Earth was born today and I was there to witness it."

Okay, I am VERY curious; what exactly are you??


Brinny:

And thus it was. A nefarious catyclism of abhorrent idiosyncrasies. (hehe just playin' with words)

Lol—you sound like you could enter the Bulwar-Lytton yearly writer’s contest and quite possibly win!


EvangelicalChristian:

The walk to the bus stop seemed longer that night than usual. in fact Donald arrived early. Who knows what life would have been like if he hadn't?

That is a very good opener; my curiosity is running wild!


Lydeanphoenix:

Is this 20 or 30 words?

When He loses one of His own, He cries not with His tears but with His blood...

To answer you question, far, far back in the thread I suggested that we could go with either 20 or 30 words. The alteration has, to use a cliché, been lost in the mist of time, but fwiw, 30 words is fine.

Anyway, your line is very beautiful and evocative, almost like poetry.


Firzenr:

Read this or die.

Count me among your instant readers; you’ve made an offer I can’t refuse!


DudDoodoo:

A long time ago Matt told Jorge he would be the first to go when he took over the world. He kept his promise.

I laughed so much when I read this—thanks for one of the better lines I’ve come across!


Phoenixtears1:

Out of her father's journal fell a scrap of paper. Two words were written in black ink: "David lives."

I liked your other line a lot as well, but I think this one really, REALLY needs to be written. It is a GREAT opener, and you have a definite gift.


Now, one more of mine:

The last thing Cory expected to find on his first day of metal detecting was a priceless diamond ring…still attached to the finger of a corpse.