Guardian Angel

[Woogyman]

Guardian Angel

Guardian Angel My Favorite Friend!
I look to you from morning until daylight end!
From the heavens I call on you
To Watch over me and a the little ones!
With each day I feel your presence.
I know you are right beside me.
I know when I feel lost, you guide!
I know when I feel lonely, you hope!
I know you give me strength to do my deeds!
It is in you Dear Angel That I believe!
So when you are going to sleep each night,
Remember to Thank Your Guardian Angel
for guiding you to Heavens Light!​

By Stephan.

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[TorchDude]

Thats very nice! What kind of rhyme scheme are you using?

Don't mean to nitpick as it was really good, but heres a few things that might help you make it better:

To the heavens makes more sense than from the heavens. Take out the "a" on the fourth line. Something needs to be done with the "with" on the fifth line. Replace either lonely or hope, so they relate better. Maybe doubt instead of lonely, or comfort instead of hope?
Thats about all I see, nothing too bad. Lets see a second draft!

 

[Woogyman]

o, thanx!