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Tell me what you think. I had planned on using the entire day in the poem, but well...I fell asleep. :o
Sparkling, burning
A shining ray
gently turning
night into day
Bright sunrise
hole in the clouds
glitter in her eyes
melting my doubts
Winds of fate
took my star
the crushing weight
of dark isn't far
Cold and dull
deep night falls
....
I can't finish the last part! I'm thinking about getting rid of the last two lines entirely and starting that part over
Sparkling, burning
A shining ray
gently turning
night into day
Bright sunrise
hole in the clouds
glitter in her eyes
melting my doubts
Winds of fate
took my star
the crushing weight
of dark isn't far
Cold and dull
deep night falls
....
I can't finish the last part! I'm thinking about getting rid of the last two lines entirely and starting that part over
