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Four friends: A Trip to the Park
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<blockquote data-quote="bobk" data-source="post: 73511698" data-attributes="member: 302382"><p>In my opinion, you have written a scene as opposed to a story. A typical story that uses the 3 act structure would have an introduction, confrontation and resolution. you gave us 5 paragraphs of detailed descriptions about your characters, but only 2 paragraphs of story. I would spend more time developing your plot. How did they meet? What transpired in each of their lives to bring them to God? What are their goals? Answers to questions like these could transform your scene into a viable story.</p><p></p><p>Also, instead of beginning your story with a detailed punch list of character information, let the descriptions develop organically in the story.</p><p></p><p>I hope you don't take this as an insult. I'm just giving you some construction criticism so that you can develop as a writer. Most importantly, keep writing!</p></blockquote><p></p>
[QUOTE="bobk, post: 73511698, member: 302382"] In my opinion, you have written a scene as opposed to a story. A typical story that uses the 3 act structure would have an introduction, confrontation and resolution. you gave us 5 paragraphs of detailed descriptions about your characters, but only 2 paragraphs of story. I would spend more time developing your plot. How did they meet? What transpired in each of their lives to bring them to God? What are their goals? Answers to questions like these could transform your scene into a viable story. Also, instead of beginning your story with a detailed punch list of character information, let the descriptions develop organically in the story. I hope you don't take this as an insult. I'm just giving you some construction criticism so that you can develop as a writer. Most importantly, keep writing! [/QUOTE]
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