Different Time, Different Place

[~SHINE~]

Different Time, Different Place

Eyes meet, look away
So many memories, what to say?

Turn your head, hide your face
Different time, different place

Years ago or yesterday
It's all the same, anyway

Time gone by without a trace
Creates a chasm, empty space

Eyes meet, look away
So many memories, what to say?


--The verse is sort of strange, I think, but I like it that way. It makes it sound more anxious or confused, which is generally the gist of the poem. If it sounds wrong at first, try reading it kind of fast. Again, I think that emphasizes the feeling more.--

 

[Quixotic the Pedestrian]

I was just speaking with a friend of mine about this very subject this morning. How coinsidental.

 

[Silver Saint]

Come now, Quix, there's no such thing.

In regards to the poem, I liked it. Well written, but I didn't get much feeling of closure. That may be intentional, to go with the excited feeling of the poem, I don't know. I agree that reading quickly helps too.
Good job.
Go with God.



I am aware,
Isacc