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Could you please review my backcover text?

Huldrich

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I wrote a theological book about salvation history. The backcover text is obviously very important. So could you give me some hints to improve it? Are there grammar errors? Is it clear, interesting or annoying?

Here it is:

The Bible was written during a centuries lasting period between the Exodus and early Christianity, and thereby gives statements on three levels: the past, present and future relative to this period. This is why biblical historicity must be verified on these three levels.

The past is primarily related to the question whether the Genesis account of creation accords with modern science. Three mainstreams are concurring with each other on this level. The first is held by young earth creationists taking literally every word of the Bible thus challenging modern science. The second refuses any scientific authenticity to Genesis relegating it to mythology. The third considers both, Genesis and science, authentic and tries to harmonize each other assuming that there is no real contradiction between both. The author of this book defends the last view proposing at the same time a new method of interpretation of Genesis, which solves some important inconsistencies.

The present of the writing of the Bible is a historical issue related to ancient Israel. On this level, it is shown that salvation history is recurring through cycles of four typical phases characterized by peace, sin, judgment and return to peace. For the time of Israel, this yields four cycles centered respectively on the straying of the Hebrew people in the desert during forty years after the Exodus, the deportation by the Assyrians and later the Babylonians, and finally the persecutions through Antiochus Epiphanes.

The future the Bible is foretelling relates to the history of the Church and the world up to the end times. It can be shown that the whole salvation history from the patriarchs passing by ancient Israel up to the end times is recurring through cycles of four typical phases. These cycles of salvation history are described by the Bible in such a typical and coherent manner as if its seventy books had been written by a single author. Based on this result, a surprising answer to the purpose of Mary’s numerous apparitions around the world is finally given.
 

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I made some editorial changes (in Word with revisions turned on), but I don't know how to get it to you. If I can't get my revision to you, here are some things I think you should change:
  1. Why not give the actual number of years (1600) of the "period" instead of saying "a centuries lasting period" (which I'd at least change to say "a centuries-long period").
  2. I would italicize the words "past", "present", and "future" both in the 1st paragraph as well as in the next three so that the reader realizes they're supposed to be linked together.
  3. Paragraph 2 should say "young-earth creationists" instead of not having the term hyphenated.
  4. Instead of saying "between both" in Paragraph 2, I'd write "between them".
  5. The first sentence of Paragraph 3 takes some thought to sink in. What does the "present of the writing of the Bible" mean, and how can the "present" relate to something that happened in the past? You need a bit more verbiage to clarify what you're talking about.
  6. There are sixty-nine books (Paragraph 4) -- not seventy.
The book sounds interesting. Something I'd like to read.
 
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