Are you there?

[kuntrygurl_26]

Hey I wrote this poem the other night, Let me know what ya think. It is being published in a local newspaper.

Are you there?

Are you there God?
I am asking because I cannot feel you.
Are you there God?
I am asking because I cannot see you
Are you there God?
I am asking because I cannot hear you.
Are you there God?
I am asking because I do not feel led by you.

Are you there my child?
I am asking because you never reached out for me.
Are you there my child?
I am asking because you never looked around to find me.
Are you there my child?
I am asking because you never read my word.
Are you there my child?
I am asking because you never seek my guidance.

Are you there God?
I am asking because I would like to know why I am so confused.
I’m here my child
Confusion comes to those whom do not seek knowledge.
Are you there God?
I am asking because I would like to know why the world was so chaotic and violent today.
I am here my child
I am sorry but I have no answer for your question, for they took me out a long time ago.

 

[CindyisHis]

Hey I wrote this poem the other night, Let me know what ya think. It is being published in a local newspaper.

Are you there?

Are you there God?
I am asking because I cannot feel you.
Are you there God?
I am asking because I cannot see you
Are you there God?
I am asking because I cannot hear you.
Are you there God?
I am asking because I do not feel led by you.

Are you there my child?
I am asking because you never reached out for me.
Are you there my child?
I am asking because you never looked around to find me.
Are you there my child?
I am asking because you never read my word.
Are you there my child?
I am asking because you never seek my guidance.

Are you there God?
I am asking because I would like to know why I am so confused.
I’m here my child
Confusing comes to those whom do not seek knowledge.
Are you there God?
I am asking because I would like to know why the world was so chaotic and violent today.
I am here my child
I am sorry but I have no answer for your question, for they took me out a long time ago.

Not bad!

I think what you're saying is pretty much the truth.

As far as spelling, no errors, language, one line needs a wee bit of tweaking. Proofreading always helps.

I think you're way ahead of me, sweetie, of where I was when I was 20. You go, girl.

And congrats on being published. Woo-hoo!

 

[Shadowcat]

Hey I wrote this poem the other night, Let me know what ya think. It is being published in a local newspaper.

Are you there?

Are you there God?
I am asking because I cannot feel you.
Are you there God?
I am asking because I cannot see you
Are you there God?
I am asking because I cannot hear you.
Are you there God?
I am asking because I do not feel led by you.

Are you there my child?
I am asking because you never reached out for me.
Are you there my child?
I am asking because you never looked around to find me.
Are you there my child?
I am asking because you never read my word.
Are you there my child?
I am asking because you never seek my guidance.

Are you there God?
I am asking because I would like to know why I am so confused.
I’m here my child
Confusion comes to those whom do not seek knowledge.
Are you there God?
I am asking because I would like to know why the world was so chaotic and violent today.
I am here my child
I am sorry but I have no answer for your question, for they took me out a long time ago.

Congrats on your poem being published . As for what I think - I think it speaks volumes as I can relate to what you have written. There have been times in my journey where I have asked that same question.

Keep up the good work.

 

[JPPT1974]

There used to be a Judy Blume book that was
Entitled "Are you there God, it is me Margaret?"

 

[kuntrygurl_26]

Thank you for the compliments guyz! God Bless--KG

 

[paulnoel]

This poem is going to be published in your local newspaper-Wow, wow what a witness thats going to be to the local people of your area-Not only are you a talented poet, but you are useing your poetry for evangelisim, Let me tell you young Lady, God is going to use you in a big way.

God bless you.

Paul.

 

[LifeInChrist]

Good Poem KG! And that too at such a young age!

 

[JPPT1974]

Great poem my friend
God bless you
Keep up the good work!

 

[kuntrygurl_26]

Thank you all so very much. God is using me alot Lately.