The different poem

[The Seb]

There once was a poem
who was a little diverse
he seemed to have smileys
at the end of each verse

People walked by
and read him with ease
they liked how he was
he was just there to please

But the big books saw this
And didn't like it one bit
So they planned something dark
and threw him into a pit

The small poem slowly wept
he didn't know why
the books had to hurt him
and leave him to die

Then something filled up the hole
with glory and light
it was the greatest book ever written
shining so bright

He said to the poem
don't be afraid
I'm the one you called upon
when you stopped and prayed

So don't ever feel down
for such things must come
so start feeling happy
and never feel glum

So The greatest book ever
lifted him out of the hole
And filled him with light
making him whole

Now i have to go
but ready for when
i come once more
amen and amen


The end

it wouldn't let me have smileys at the end of each verse

 

[the hidden light]

i liked it it was cute.

 

[the hidden light]

so was the greatest book ever writen the bible? that's what it sounded like.

 

[The Seb]

so was the greatest book ever writen the bible? that's what it sounded like.

yeah thats what i was trying to say... i had a better version written up but my computer stuffed up and i had to write it out all again but i couldn't remember it, plus i didn't want to go to bed before it was finished so i kind of rushed this version... anyway i was sad cause it wouldn't let me have smileys at the end of each verse (because they all corrosponded with the verse that they were next)
anyway thanks for the positive remarks, i enjoy them very much so

 

[raihna]

good job !!!

 

[the hidden light]

anyway thanks for the positive remarks, i enjoy them very much so

hey anytime keep writing.

 

[The Seb]

thanks

 

[the hidden light]

 

[delicate_flower]

I really liked that. It was so simple but it seems to have a greater impact than other longer poems that run on and on...