Silver Strings

[delicate_flower]

-~ * ~- Silver Strings -~ * ~-

Emptiness is my soul; the hunger for love is no longer there.

Musty innocence can no longer hide my face,
The dreaded tears leave their faithless scars.
On my cheek, coldness prints a callous stain;
My soul softly holds my lonesome guitar.

My fingertips strum the few silvery strings,
And into the darkness I release one longer note.
With no song in my heart and no love in my soul,
No beautiful tones can escape my throat.

I let loose my hands and let my guitar fall,
The hope of my song has diminished beyond low.
With a soundless crash and a tearful demise,
I try to free my mind from another torturous blow.

Sad eyes in the mirror reflect into my heart,
A teardrop captures the remaining hint of light.
The cry of hollow strings awfully screamed!
They shrieked so loudly into that dreadful night!

I witnessed my spirit float out of those cracks,
And into the darkness my soul slipped away!
With lifeless fingers I clawed the weak air,
Allowing my heart to twitch in dismay…!

Atlas my poor spirit flittered beyond my reach;
I watched as the night sky swallowed it whole!
Now the empty strings lay before my battered eyes,
And no longer can love survive in my soul.

Like the broken pieces of my shattered guitar,
I feel the sting of sorrow break my fragile heart.
And like the damaged song never leaving my woe,
I feel my loneliness slowly tear me apart...

-~*~- Sonya B. -~*~-
-~ August 11, 2004 ~-

 

[Quixotic the Pedestrian]

I'm glad to see you back.

Very sad poem, but if I can judge you correctly .... I'm betting you made it sad on purpose

 

[Silver Saint]

Wow. It isn't often that you find such bitter, articulate expression. I for one laud your resolve. Most are too timid or too unskilled to say such things well. I'll have to read it again later if you'd like a more techical opinion. I'm content with emotions for now.
Go with God.



I am aware,
Isacc

 

[LunaLee]

Wow, that was awesome. It's the kind of poem I wish I could write, so raw and emotional, but still composed and well written. I really enjoyed it.
I'm not sure I like the exclaimation marks at the ends of some of the lines, it kinda takes your attention off of the words . . . but that's just me.

Keep it up!

 

[No*coincidence]

That was good. I think the atmosphere that's set when you read that poem, is just what you wanted, which means you did a really good job. It's kinda freeky, but really good.