Poetry Contest

[Black_Ivy]

Hey everyone, I thought a new poetry contest might be interesting!

Here are the rules:

• Only one entry per a person
• There must be at least 3 entries/participants
• Contest will end in 7 days (on Friday, March 3)
• Write about any subject, in any style

I will give 500 blessings to the best entry, based on correct grammar, overall quality, creativity, and effective use of poetic elements.

 

[bumblebee62331]

Ok my poem is a bit depressing. I wrote it from the perspective of a mother of a young boy, Daniel Morcombe, who went missing just before Christmas a couple of years ago in Australia. He is still missing. His mother gave an interview, and in it she said "I lit three candles and one of them went out immediately. I then knew that Daniel was dead."

This poem is totally my work (I don't know the Morcombes). I wrote it about a year ago, so yeah, it might not be totally wonderful. Daneil went missing when he was waiting for a bus and the bus was running late, so the driver didn't stop for him. If you want futher details on Daniel, his parents made a website: www.danielmorcombe.com.au.

I Lit Three Candles

I lit three candles just today
The flames all flickered red
But one went out and then I knew
My little Dan was dead

It's been so hard to carry on
And think that all is fine
When little Danny's missing still
An awful, painful crime

I've often wondered if he had
Stopped to wait elsewhere
Would little Danny still be gone
Into the sky's thin air?

I wish that I were there that day
To keep him from all harm
I would have tried to stop it all
And kept poor Danny calm

I held a service, cried and prayed
That little Dan was safe
But when that candle lost its flame
I lost a lot of faith

My boys both try to keep me calm
Their spirits sinking low
As every day goes by and by
And progress is so slow

I know that I will see my boy
And hold him close again
But it will be a long long time
Until I'm quite sure when

So this I pray for my dear son,
I pray that you're still here
And every day I'll search for you
And cry a silent tear

I won't give up until you're back
And we can smile once more
My little boy, my gorgeous child,
Please answer to my call

I'll always think about that day,
The day you missed the bus
And we are waiting for the day
When you return to us

I lit three candles just today
The flames all flickered red
But one went out and then I knew
My little Dan was dead


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[writer4him]

This is a poem that i wrote for a contest caled fine arts, through my church. And right now i'm really nervous about it becuase we find out the results at this ceremony on the 4th. THe theme of the contest was one life one chance.

One...

One-day judgment will come
No one will be left out
Everyone’s fate will be decided

Loved ones will disappear
In an instant
For the wrath of the Lamb will come
Everyone will see it, but

Only the true believers will understand
Non-believers will be confused
Each person with their own opinion

Choose the right one to go to
Heaven
And live for eternity
Nothing else can save you
Come into the light today
Everyday that comes could be your last.

What will you do with the time you’ve been given?

 

[littleJo]

Ivy

It creeps up walls
It twists and curls

Green as poison by summer
Brown and brittle by autum
Slow as a snail, but fast a a runner

Its beauty few ever see
Like the sun

Shining in the sky
But few ever stop to look
and marvel.
Like a pond,
covered with scum.
People see it and say,
'God made that last,
when he was running out
of materials.'
But it has a hidden beauty-
like a rose.
People think they see
the rose,
but they never could if
it were thrust right under their nose.

For if they can't see
the beauty in scum, why is
the rose any different?

 

[Lycana]

I'll go ahead and enter this one.

Bright Ocean Dream
I float
Upon a great bright sea
The quiet waters are transparent glass.
The sea holds my body like a warm watery bed
Small fish and great ships pass by (and maybe mermaids)
But I am alone
Alone in the flowing sea
Above me in the breezy air seagulls call:
A sound both free and beautiful
And yet I sink down, slowly, away from the upper airs,
Safe.
Slowly I am covered with the warm waters
In quiet, in peace I sink
Deep, deep I travel down
Into the blue-green interior of the ocean.
In the murkiness I think I see a mermaid.
I see her hair, long and red swirling through the waters.
Her body a swift glitter of silver in the greenness.
Down here, the waters are warm and clear.
The sea is dim to see, my eyes are closed in something like sleep
I am safe in the warm interior of a
bright ocean dream.

 

[Black_Ivy]

Wow, great poems. Thanks to everyone who have entered so far!

 

[Black_Ivy]

Only two more days to enter.

 

[Jesus_is_my_!Hero!]

This is my work,I entered the contest on poetry.com. and they copyrighted it to me.

Youth Storm

Young minds clouded by untruth.
Creation grieves for it's lost youth
A teen rebellion starts to form
Rebellion brews, a youth storm!
Crusaders for salvations gift
Defenders of a worldwide shift
A change to make, a life to live.
A whole new chance to Earth they give.
Gabrielle Nicole Poor
[SIZE=-1]Copyright ©2006 Gabrielle Poor[/SIZE]

 

[walkin2e]

Here is my entry:

[SIZE=+1]Patience is a Virtue[/SIZE]
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Patience is a fine virtue sought by many
Many fortunes were made starting with a penny
While in the Army I had to hurry up and wait
Many have had to wait for the right mate

All of our days are filled with waiting times
We wait while the cashier counts the dimes
There is no reason to get in a rush
We all have to wait, why make a fuss

A wise old man once said to me
Time goes by fast just wait and see
Before you know it you will be old and gray
Enjoy your youth, have fun and play

I know I can't control the times and seasons
Waiting times happen for many reasons
Wisdom comes from waiting on things
The wait is worth the prize it brings

Patience and endurance goes hand in hand
The long wait is over, strike up the band
It takes time to grow a large tree
But it is worth the wait its' beauty to see

Copyright 2005 Irvin L. Rozier aka walkin2e

 

[girlwhocant]

Why do you forgive me?
Someone who's done so wrong,
Makes a mistake, Prays for forgiveness,
And gets it,
Why do you forgive me?

Why do you listen me?
A person who denied your work,
Denied your miracles,
And yet you still listen to me,
Why do you still listen to me?

Why did you sacrifice your son for me?
Sacrifice him so i can live,
To give us a chance,
Although we have so many chances,
You keep on forgiving,
Why did you sacrifice your son for us?

Do you hate the world in it's present state?
A world of war and hate,
Torment and abuse,
The perfect world you made so long ago,
Destroyed,
Do you hate the world in it's present state?

Although the world's sometimes in a sorry state,
There's a few who still have faith,
And these people will spread your word,
And we'll have an everlasting Faith,
And the perfect world we'll have...

 

[Black_Ivy]

OK, the contest is over.

I gave each entry a score from 1 to 10 for each of the four catagories that I mentioned in the origional post. First place is 500 blessing, and I decided to give 100 blessings to second place, also....

Without further ado, here are the winners.

1st place: writer4him 500 blessings
2nd place (tied): Lycana 100 blessings
2nd place (tied): walkin2e 100 blessings


It was very close, and each entry was amazingly well written. I had a very difficult time judging.

 

[Lycana]

Thanks, I'm honored to be tied in 2nd place!

 

[walkin2e]

Thanks! It was an honor to enter your contest. All of the poems were very good!

Thanks for selecting my poem for concurrent second place!

walkin2e

 

[kaljay]

Hey everyone, I thought a new poetry contest might be interesting!

Here are the rules:

• Only one entry per a person
• There must be at least 3 entries/participants
• Contest will end in 7 days (on Friday, March 3)
• Write about any subject, in any style

I will give 500 blessings to the best entry, based on correct grammar, overall quality, creativity, and effective use of poetic elements.

i thought your idea of a poem contest was a great idea... i'd love to see more of this kinda stuff here. congratulations to the winners, all entries were great... it must've been a hard decision to choose a winner there.

 

[Lubiana]

Yeah, I'd love to see more contests!

 

[writer4him]

Thanks, i thgought th onw before mine would win. This past Saturday (march4th) that same poem one in the district fine arts festival through my church, and will be going to nationals. I love peotry.

 

[bumblebee62331]

Thanks, i thgought th onw before mine would win. This past Saturday (march4th) that same poem one in the district fine arts festival through my church, and will be going to nationals. I love peotry.

Thanks.

And good luck with the nationals.

 

[Paladin Dave]

Why do I only see these things after they are over?