Pathfinder's Poem Thread

[Pathfinder]

I don't really want to make multiple threads for my poems, because many will be short.

So, here's a very short two stanza poem. I like it, so I might add on.

God's Lied

I sing a kind German Lied*,
To my God, I pray to thee,
With words only soft and sweet,
The Lord's a savior to me.

Woe, the Lord is wise and strong,
He'll save our souls in Heaven,
But, his kids may do no wrong,
Or there will be no taken.

*Lied is the German word for 'song', it is pronounced (Leet.)

 

[Pathfinder]

Ghastly Surprise

Gliding through that ghastly mist,
Sliding through a vision test,
It came upon me as a surprise,
Wearing such a ghostly disguise.

Knew not if it was real,
Seemed like a frighting feel,
Walking in an unknown park,
There it was, a spectre-bark*.

*Ghost Ship

 

[Pathfinder]

Here's another ghost ship one. I wanted to get another angle, and I tried a different sceme.

That ghastly Appearence

It was one night,
That I had a great fright,
I came upon a ghost ship,
Causing a trembling lip.

I could not say a word,
My fear could be heard,
Then I came to my senses,
Thoughts trapped in fences.

The boat was coming to me,
I then left what was to be,
A life threatening experience,
That ghostly midnight appearence.


Some feedback would be nice. I'd like to know how I can improve.

 

[daughterofzion]

Here's another ghost ship one. I wanted to get another angle, and I tried a different sceme.

That ghastly Appearence

It was one night,
That I had a great fright,
I came upon a ghost ship,
My heart drop, some dip.

I could not say a word,
My fear could be heard,
Then I came to my senses,
Thoughts trapped in fences.

The boat was coming to me,
I then left what was to be,
A life threatening experience,
That ghostly midnight appearence.


Some feedback would be nice. I'd like to know how I can improve.

I really like your play on words. Very clever. My heart beat faster!

 

[Pathfinder]

Thank you I really appreciate the feed back.