"Looking back to the times we had"

[Jesae]

i wrote this back in Feb and i just want to know what everybody thinks about it. all comments good or bad plz....
thanx

LOOKING BACK TO THE TIMES WE HAD, NEVER REALIZING THE TRUTH WAS THERE. THE BROTHERHOOD WE HAD, THAT NEVER SEEMED TO FLARE. BUT NOW IT’S ALL OVER. BECAUSE WE NOW SOBER. THE HURT I FEEL IS DESTROYING ME OUT IN THIS WAR. I CAN’T SEEM TO DO ANYTHING BUT CONTEMPLATE THE FUTURE WITHOUT LOOKING TO EVERYTHING. I REMEMBER THE TIMES WHEN WE WERE JUST KIDS WITHOUT THE FEAR OF DEATH, THAT WE ALWAYS PUT TO TEST.
BUT NOW YOU GONE. LOCKED UP, ME WITHOUT MY BROTHERS TO SEE. I WILL REMEMBER YOU FACE AND BE SURE TO WALK THE PATH TO YOUR PLACE. SIX FEET UNDERGROUND IN YOUR SILVER CASE. I’LL WALK TO YOUR STONE AND SAY MY GOODBYE AND I’LL GO TO YOUR CELL AND TELL YOU THAT YOU NEVER FELL. AND WHEN YOU WALK OUT THOSE BIG BLACK DOORS, AWAY FROM YOUR CAGE, I’LL BE THERE TO OPEN THAT DOOR TO A WHOLE NEW PAGE. WE’LL CRUISE DOWN
TO THE PIER WHERE WE WERE LAST AND POUR OUT OUR LOVE THROUGH THE BOTTLE THAT BROUGHT US THERE. WHEN OUR TIME COMES WE’LL BE TOGETHER AGAIN, WALKIN TO THE MAN, HAND IN HAND, WITH OUR LOVE REGAINED LIKE IT WAS, WHEN IT BEGAN.

 

[psycmajor]

Sad

 

[oncewaslost]

it's good. you're missing some of your verbs through. thanks for sharing.