Illuminate

[ignight]

Me and my cousin are writing a book. I would like to know honestly who hear who be intrested in reading this book. Hear Goes....."Iluminate" is a story about people who live in a dark World...Literatly. They can not see when they are going and therefore run into things around them. they become scared and ugly to the point where they dont want to see their uglyness.
But in this world there is a light. Few people have exepted it but though who have are filled by the light and can see there uglyness. But because they can see where they are going they do not run into things and therefore are slowly healed over time. The people living in darkness persecute though who live in light because in the light they are seen. I got this book idead thinking of spiritual warfare and base it on the verse John 3:19-21. the whole thing is not bibical there is lots unreal animals and such. Tell me if you personaly would be intrested....or if you see any problems with it. Thanks
Ignight

 

[MrBF1V3]

What you are describing is an allegory, and it sounds like an interesting one. It's sometimes difficult to be as subtle in your situation as you might need to be, and you have to draw the reader into an unusual situation.

But hey, why would anyone want to write an easy, basic, just like every other kind of story? Give it your best shot, (then, if you're like me, edit a lot). You might come up with something really great.

B5

 

[ignight]

Hey Thanks , I have been waiting for the longest time for somone to reply to this. I enjoyed Hearing your imput. Im so excited to write this Book...But very unmotivated...which is why I have my cousin around You sound like you enjoy writing, what kind of stories do you write?

 

[MrBF1V3]

No problem, ignight, glad to help.

I tend to write science fiction, but I have dabbled in fantasy, if I come up with a good idea. I don't think anything I write would be instantly recognizable as Christian, but most of the time there is some redeeming value. -although, recently I wrote a ghost story for an on line for fun contest. I kind of found it all rather unsettling. On the other hand, the comments were good. I guess I used a well worn ghost story formula, but I did it well. I'm currently tied for first place. (Go figure)

I consider myself a hobby writer. I've tried to publishing route before, and after getting nowhere, I gave up and started writing for myself. However, this last year I finally got published. I have a short story (really short) in a flash fiction anthology. It was kind of cool, I had to buy copies of the book for most of my family.

Well, better days,

B5

 

[ignight]

Wow, Cool. Do You Mind if I ask what the title is of what you wrote? ( You dont have to tell me but Im intrested, im running out Of things to read!) Me and my cousin actully wrote a science fiction book. Its not very good but we are working on it, I think my cousin hopes to publish it somday.... so on that note, is it hard to publish? sounds like you had a little trouble. Thanks again!!

Ps. I hope you win the contest!, ( I think i would Get creeped out writing a ghost story)

 

[MrBF1V3]

I'm not sure if I can answer your question without crossing the dreaded spam line. I'll go back and read the rules again and let you know. (Is there a moderator out there?)

Publishing can be difficult, though these days there are more options. Publishing online or with a vanity press are usually the easiest, but not recommended. (Do not ever pay someone to publish your book.) A POD (publish on demand) which is usually an online situation where the books are printed as they are ordered. There are some good ones, do your research. The publishing companies are the most difficult, if you intend to go that route, an agent would be a good idea.

As for me, I submitted a number of stories, and progressed from the "We are sending two rejection slips this time, one for this story and one for the next story you may want to send us." to "Nice story, however it does not fit our needs at this time. Feel free to submit again."

We'll be in touch,

B5

 

[MrBF1V3]

Okay, I read the rules again, and I think I can answer you. Keep in mind, I am not trying to sell you anything, I am just answering your question.

The story I published was called "The Coin" and it appeared in Flashspec Volume One which is published by Equilibrium books, which is a POD. Flashspec is a book a speculative fiction, and it is flash fiction, all of the stories are 1000 words or less.

The good news is, the book can be ordered easily on line. The bad news is, Equilibrium is an Austrailian publisher, unless you live there, the cost of shipping is as much or more than the cost of the book. However, since the book has been published, I could just post it here, if you are that interested.

B5

 

[ignight]

Hey, thanks for all that information on publishing, (I needed it) I suppose if I want to get serious I should really start taking these things into concideration. Hey thanks for thelling me the name of your book ( wow...a thousand words or less....I could never do that.) If you want to paste it thats fine with me , but I dont want to cheat you out of your money. o sorry I have to go,type you later!
ignight

 

[MrBF1V3]

Flash fiction is both easier and harder than I thought at first, but it isn't bad to try. Trying to balance a complete story with a low word count is a balancing act, but it can be done. In the wikipedea article on flash fiction they quote a six word story attributed to Hemingway, It's really good.

If I post I don't lose anything. It was a one time payment thing. However, this thread is about you and your idea, so I will start another thread.

Have an enjoyable All Saints Day,

B5

 

[ignight]

Flash fiction is both easier and harder than I thought at first, but it isn't bad to try. Trying to balance a complete story with a low word count is a balancing act, but it can be done. In the wikipedea article on flash fiction they quote a six word story attributed to Hemingway, It's really good.

If I post I don't lose anything. It was a one time payment thing. However, this thread is about you and your idea, so I will start another thread.

Have an enjoyable All Saints Day,

B5

Hay, when you do start a thread How in the world do I find it??? make sure you tell me what it is called so I know what to look for.
Maybe I will try some flash fiction.....I Guess You might be able to call my indroduction a Illuminate flash fiction, If it were alone.... I will have to try. o Happy saints Day to you also!!!
ignight

 

[MrBF1V3]

Oh, sorry, I forgot to say.

The name of the story is The Coin, and I believe the Thread is somewhere in the Creative Writing area.

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[ignight]

Oh, sorry, I forgot to say.

The name of the story is The Coin, and I believe the Thread is somewhere in the Creative Writing area.

B5

Thank yo so much, I look forward to reading it!!

 

[ignight]

Ok I dont mean to drag this thread on to long, but will you read this and tell me if it is too repeditive or boaring or ...anyhting, this is the introduction to Illuminate, tell me what you think.


Falling to Shadow

“ why would you want to live like that? You are only admitting what is wrong with you.” the voice was cast from the shadow with a hatred.
“How can you get any acceptance in that form? Every one can see your faults, you are ugly, It is so plain to tell in that light.”
The light around the young man did not cast far. He squinted trying to make out where the voice had come from. It was to dark, He could not see in to the deep blackness.
“Leave the light come with us…..” the darkness was over bearing. His light seemed so small to the surrounding darkness. He felt as though every one could see him, in his hideousness, but he could not see them, they had hid themselves in the darkness.
Why should he be reveled to all, even he could see himself, but he himself could see no one else.
He looked down at his swollen hands, the blood was dry on his arms, seen clearly in the light.
I n the darkness, he could never see where he was going, he had constantly been hurt by running into things and others. But then again he could not see his wounds either, he had not wanted to. It took practice, but you could get around in the dark, eventfully you would not notice it, the is until you saw the light and had something to compare yourself to.
He shuddered, and drew his arms back.
“that’s right…What has it ever done for you except, brought you pain, by letting you see your self as you really are. You don’t really want that do you? Why would you?” The voice taunted him, he looked down only to see his legs, full of cut and blood. He rested his head on his knees, trying to shadow his eyes from the light. The pain welled up, and he cried out. It was too much of a burden, to see himself like this.
“that’s right tell it to leave, You don’t want it hear…we don’t want it hear.”
The man began to sob, as the darkness engulfed him, the light dimmed then flickered, then melted into darkness. The man sobbed echoed along with the voice “ welcome brother, the light is no longer here to condemn us……we are free”

 

[MrBF1V3]

Pretty good, not too long or boring. There are a few spelling/grammer errors which you will want to see to in your next edit. e.g. "It was too dark." (not to)

I think you may be telegraphing the analogy a bit much with what the characters say, especially the ones hidden in the dark. If they are self-deluded, they believe their own lies and will speak accordingly.

This is also a suggestion, you might want to give your character a name, and maybe some kind of background. My first question would be; Why is he willing to try the light, when obviously everyone he knows is against it?

A little confused at the end, why are they telling the light they don't want to hear, when it's obvious they really don't want to see?

I do think it's an interesting idea, you should keep working on it.

B5

 

[ignight]

Good, Thanks for your imput I will work on thjose things. I see What you mean about the end, I didn't evne see that when I read back over it, I will change that.
I was not going to give this character a back round because I was not going to really use him for the book , I was just trying to get the point across the readers how this world works....(I guess I could actully use this to start the story and then bring it back into the book later for one of the characters.I will have to think about that..)
About the person in the drakness... I never really thought of it as a person, almost more of a demon, so it might not necisarly(...i definatly spelled that wrong) belive its own lie, but is more just trying to cause this man to fall. Do you think it sould be a person or a demon??