I need your help for a title...

[LunaLee]

I've had writer's block for a while now, but today I wrote this. Maybe it doesn't make any sense, I dunno. But it doesn't have a title yet, so please help me think of one! Oh, and please say so if you think it's horrible, okay?? I can take it, trust me, lol.

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Sunlight filters through your eyes
The day looks like a banjo's song
How could anything go wrong
I think I've loved you all along

Like a spring morning, so alive
A new note in the robin's tune
When is the next blue moon
Nothing ever comes too soon

Beauty is a drop of rain
Simple seem the clouds above
Fly off, pure and sinless dove
Escape from this and bring back love

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Kinda like a nonsense poem . . . tell me what you think, it's important

 

[Picture.Of.Obedience]

I've had writer's block for a while now, but today I wrote this. Maybe it doesn't make any sense, I dunno. But it doesn't have a title yet, so please help me think of one! Oh, and please say so if you think it's horrible, okay?? I can take it, trust me, lol.

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Sunlight filters through your eyes
The day looks like a banjo's song
How could anything go wrong
I think I've loved you all along

Like a spring morning, so alive
A new note in the robin's tune
When is the next blue moon
Nothing ever comes too soon

Beauty is a drop of rain
Simple seem the clouds above
Fly off, pure and sinless dove
Escape from this and bring back love

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Kinda like a nonsense poem . . . tell me what you think, it's important

Beautiful Poem!!! its really great, but i wouldnt know a title for it either..... i really liked it though.....

 

[bubblegirl0101]

Great poem
The only thing I would change is to elaborate on the last line. It says "Escape from this" but what is "this"?

It kind of reminds me of Ecclesiastes 3 because of the line "Nothing ever comes too soon", maybe you could base a title on that somehow. There's also a lot of references to music and seasons/nature, so a title related to those would be good too. Or if the you in the poem is a specific person, you could put their name in the title. Like "[person's name]'s Eyes" or something like that.

 

[LunaLee]

Thanks for the input, maybe I should say "Escape from hate and bring back love" ???

And I like the idea about Ecclesiates 3, I'll read that chapter and maybe that'll be the title. Thanks!!!

Anyone else have ideas for a title? Or maybe, how did the poem make you feel?

 

[~SHINE~]

I like it! As for a title--well, I'm not the best person at coming up with titles, but you could take a title from the last line and call it "Bring Back Love." Just a thought.

 

[LunaLee]

I like that! "Bring Back Love". . . sounds like the title to a hippie song, you know? lol. But I think that'll be the title. Thanks ~SHINE~ !

 

[LiberatedChick]

I like the last verse...I don't get the bit about the banjos song though. I think shines idea for the title is nice.