Bound

[Silver Saint]

Bound



Bound at the eyes,

Tied at the chest,

Tightly held against your breast.



My mind shrinks back,

My soul delves in,

My heart’s in your hand

My flesh gladly sins.



Your legs bound ‘round me,

Holding me here.

The fact is I won’t leave;

That I should though, is clear.



We’re bound at the hip,

The sex,

The wish,

Your screams, your arms,

All held in my grip.



Your hair ensnares me,

Holding me to my task.

How I had wanted to wait,

Too late to look back.



My love, I am sorry!

Though I am holding you now,

Our wrong is apparent

As the sweat on your brow.



All I had to offer is spent,

And, though our love is true,

This recompense could never be worth it,

And neither can you.



I just wrote this last night, and I do realize that the subject matter is a touchy one, but I do believe that it is right in this sense. If I offended anyone, I appologize, but I couldn't say this and not get a dirty, gritty feeling. Give me your thoughts.


I am aware,
Isacc

 

[Marie]

That is a touchy subject, but that doesn't mean that Christians shouldn't write about it.

I'm not offended, either.

If I may be psychologically honest, this poem makes me wonder what's going on in your heart, or at least what emotions were there when you wrote it. Not in a sarcastic way, but honestly. It is really awesome in that you intertwined the emotional and physical side within every paragraph. That is really complex, and you did it perfectly.

You were also uniquely descriptive. Normally, males tend to focus solely on the physical aspect, and simply focus on sex, sex, sex, y'know? The way you wrote this, you described what was happening, but you didn't describe what was happening. You informed your audience about what was going on, but you didn't describe the details. I know what I'm trying to say- am I getting the point across? Anyway, it was very unique, which is awesome. Your rhythm is also very good.

Overall, it is a great poem. Granted, it made me tilt my head to the side a couple of times, but, I'm me. You took a touchy subject and put sincere words to it, which was brilliant. Great work!

 

[Victorian Rose]

I agree with Marie!