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I am currently writing 2 chapter books.My mom said it sounded professional.I'm glad I have an imagination.
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Tariel said:Well good for you...I suppose. Anything you'd like to share? Or did you just feel like informing us that your mom thinks you sound professional
I was reading it to my mom.She said I sounded professional.Straight from the horses mouth.
Here is an example.."As Nancy walked toward the tall,worn,chipped door,she suddenly paused.Her mouth was dry.She tried to speak even one word,but it was litterally impossible.Nancy's eyes opened as wide as saucer cups upon her face.You'll never guess what was in front of her sky blue eyes....Jacques Brunais!He was fiddling around with the stolen money!'So,it was Jacques the whole time!,Nancy thought in awe.She never would have suspected him.Jacques suddenly turned around and realized Nancy was standing behind him.'Uh oh,I better hide.No time.Run!,Nancy thought nervously and uptight.Jacques grabbed something potentially dangerous and ran after her.Nancy obviously was not quik enough,because,Jacques caught up with her.He grabbed the harmful and unknown object,and hit Nancy in the skull hard enough to knock her out.Then everything wen't black...
That was something I just cooked up now.It is not part of my books.Just an example.If you'd like to read some of my stories,I can copy them from my note pad and paste it in this thread.
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This is one of the books i'm working on.It is a Nancy Drew book.The plotline is orginal,but not all the characters.Sorry I tend to drag the beginning out.Enjoy and thanks 4 reading!There is more,But I have to post it in a second post because it fills it up.
The Case of the Stolen Gold
Chapter One:Trip to the castle
Eighteen year-old Nancy Drew was sound asleep in her room in River Heights peacefully on a saturday morning.As she lay in her full-sized bed,a lock of her thick,wavy, shoulder-lenth red-blond hair fell over on the left side of her face as she lay on her left side sound asleep.
Suddenly,the phone rang.It startled Nancy out of a deep sleep as she jumped up to answer.She then picked up the translucent deep-purple cordless phone that was on the glossed,cherry wood two-drawer nightstand."Hello?"Nancy said sleepily."Oh Nancy,sorry to wake you up but we just discovered something interesting."It was Frank and Joe Hardy.Frank was the one speaking on the phone."What is it Frank?What's so interesting?And where's Joe?"Nancy asked suddenly awoke at the sound of this.
"We were doing some research on the internet about a castle in England called The Smith Castle.Supposedly King Johnson Smith the third had some gold stashed away in a secret room.Someone found it once shortly after the King died in 1513.But it was stolen three years after being discovered by one of the Kings servants.Wer'e going to fly to England tonight and wanted to know if you would like to come.We are going to stay in a nice but affordable suite called Chambrolay five blocks away from the castle.For the plane it is seven-hundred dollars per person,and the suite cost one-hundred dollars a night.It's worth the money,though.It's really nice."Frank's voice sounded full of excitement.
"And to answer your question about Joe,he's outside washing our brand new blue sports car that mom and dad just bought us."Frank said exitedly without taking a single breath."When did you get a sports car?"Nancy asked trying to hide the giggle in her voice but failed."We just got it last month and Joe has already gotten it dirty.So that's the privilage of being the older brother.I made him wash it.Only because he dirtied it.If we both would have dirtied it,i'd be outside helping him."Frank replied with laughter in his voice."Really?You'd help him?"Nancy asked curiously."No."Frank said.Nancy stifled a giggle over the phone,and this time succeeding.
"So are you coming with us?"Frank asked eagerly."Sounds like we have another mystery on our hands.Gee,I'd love to,Frank,but it's really short notice and I don't know if I can afford paying for it and the suite and all.I'll call you back in a few minutes and let you know if I can gkay?"Nancy asked."Okay,let me know what you come up with.Bye Nance."Frank said dissapointedly.Nancy set the cordless phone back on the nightstand inside the matching charger.
She stood up and wen't to take a hot five minute shower before breakfast.It refreshed her and woke her up instantaneously.She got dressed into a pair of worn,indigo bell bottom jeans,a pair of hot pink sneakers,and a casual,long sleeved pale blue v-neck shirt.
Nancy walked downstairs and into the considerably large kitchen for breakfast and ran into Hannah,the house keeper.
"Hello,Nancy.How was your sleep?"Hannah asked."I had a good nights sleep.I got a phone call this morning from the Hardy boys asking me if i'd like to fly to England tonight to help them search for the stolen gold of Smith castle."Nancy replied."Ooh Nancy,sounds like another case your working on."Hannah said excitedly."Well,yes,if I can afford it and be ready on such short notice."Nancy said.
"Well Nancy,how much is it?"Hannah asked."Seven-hundred dollars per person for one trip on the plane.And the Chambrolay suite costs one-hundred dollars a night.It's an expense isn't it Hannah?I mean,think about it.The plane trip back,depending how many nights I stay at the Chambrolay.All the total of that could add up to over two-thousand dollars,Hannah."Nancy replied."Nancy,hun,have you forgotten your father is a lawyer?They make good money."Hannah said confidently.
Just then Carson Drew walked through the front door just in time for breakfast."Hi dad."Nancy said enthusiastically."Hello,Nancy.Hi there,Hannah."Carson said."Well hello Carson."Hannah replied.Carson gave Nancy and Hannah a hug."Come on you two,I just finished breakfast.I made eggs,pankakes,and toast for all of us."Hannah said proudly.They all sat down on the small spruce wood table.Hannah set down the ceramic antique,deep green plates and the silver forks on the small,round table.Nancy broke the silence.
"So dad where were you?"Nancy asked."I was nextdoor talking to Mr.Brown about his painting services and wondered if he'd redo the kitchen for us in a soft,creamy yellow color in glazed paint.You know,the kind you can actually clean."Carson laughed as he said that."That's nice dad.Um...Can I ask you something?"Nancy asked."Sure sweetheart."Carson replied to his daughter in a loving,fatherly tone of voice."The Hardy boys called this morning.They wanted me to fly to England with them tonight to investigate an old castle and try to find the gold that was discovered by one of the King's servant's in 1513 after he died but it was stolen three years later after the King's death.I know it's a great expense but I really wan't to get to the bottom of this and find the gold."Nancy said in one breath."Just how much will this cost,Nancy?"Carson asked suspiciously."It could add up to possibly over two-thousand dollars.The plane cost seven-hundred dollars for one trip and the Chambrolay suite were we will stay,costs one-hundred dollars a night."Nancy said solemnly and sadly thinking her father would not let her go.She sighed."Well,alright you can gn one condition."Carson said as if he were counting to three."What condition dad?"Nancy asked with extreme eagerness."You have to call me everyday and let me know what's going on."Carson laughed."Thanks dad!But how will you cover the expense?"Nancy asked."I have the all the money I need,Nancy.I can afford it easily."Carson simply explained."Alright.I'll go call the Hardy boys and tell them i'm coming with them."Nancy said with a skip in her step.She hurredly ran up the stairs.
First she called Bess and George to let them know she was on another case.Bess picked up the phone."Oh hi Nan(she had caller id),What's going on?"Bess said happily."You'll never guess where i'm going!"Nancy said like she was hiding a childish secret."The lit up city streets of Chicago?The rugged mountains of Colorado?The sandy beaches of Florida?The busy bustling streets of New York?"Bess said trying to guess."She didn't mean it litteraly,Bess."George said."Oh hi George!How are you?"Nancy asked with excitement."I'm good.I was listening to Bess constantly try to guess where you were going this time, Nan.You sure kept her in suspense."George said and giggled."Guys,i'm going to England to find some gold that a King had stashed away but one of his servants had found the gold after the kings death in 1513.Then it was stolen three years later.I'm going with the Hardy boys!"Nancy said."Wow Nancy,I never thought you would have to deal with a case halfway across the world."Bess said."Wer'e really going to miss you Nancy."George said sadly.
"You guys,it's not like i'm moving there.I might stay for a week or two."Nancy said sympethetically."Well alright,I guess that's not so bad.We can live with that,right George?"Bess asked."Yeah,I guess.So you better get packing Nancy.You don't wan't to miss your plane."George said with encouragment."Okay,bye guys.But can you do me a tiny favor?"Nancy asked hesitantly."What?" George asked."Can you guys call Ned for me and tell him what's going on and that i'll call him when I get to England?"Nancy asked."Sure Nancy.We'll let him know everything.But call us when your there.Bye."Bess said as she hung up the phone.
I have to call the Hardy boys,I almost forgot,Nancy thought.
She dialed the number."Hello?"It was Joe speaking this time."Hi Joe!Tell Frank i'm going to England with you guys.Iv'e gotta pack.See ya there!"Nancy said."Bye,Nance!"Joe said excitedly.Nancy hung the phone up and put it in it's rightful place.
Now to pack,Nancy thought.Nancy grabbed her large,beige,floral print suite case out of the walk in closet."I need to pack enough clothes for two weeks maybe three weeks tops."Nancy said to herself.
Nancy had a feeling she would not really need it all,but she had to be prepared.She packed seventeen casual shirts,five pairs of jeans,five pairs of shorts,five pairs of shoes,and pajamas and such.This should be more than plenty,she thought.Nancy then wen't to the large bathroom that she could access from in her room.She grabbed all the hygiene products she would need,and then organized it in a small,pale blue leather overnight bag.She washed her face,put on some makeup,and put some copper-light red lowlights in her hair from the lowlight kit she bought.It matched her red-blond hair.It did take a few minutes,though.
By the time Nancy was finished,she ran downstairs with her luggage and loaded it in her purple convertible.Then she wen't inside for lunch.Hannah made a turkey sandwhich and a salad for Nancy.Nancy sat down to eat."Thanks,Hannah."She remarked."Your welcome Nancy."Hannah said.Hannah was grateful that they appreciated her.Nancy gulped her food up in less than five minutes then ran to tell her father and Hannah goodbye."By dad!By Hannah!"She called.She wen't to give them both hugs."Call me if you ever need anything Nancy."Carson said."Goodbye sweetheart!"Hannah said."Here is my credit card to purchase the tickets and pay for the suite and anything else."Carson told his daughter."Thanks dad.I'll call you when i'm there."Nancy said as she gave them both kisses on the cheek.
The Case of the Stolen Gold
Chapter One:Trip to the castle
Eighteen year-old Nancy Drew was sound asleep in her room in River Heights peacefully on a saturday morning.As she lay in her full-sized bed,a lock of her thick,wavy, shoulder-lenth red-blond hair fell over on the left side of her face as she lay on her left side sound asleep.
Suddenly,the phone rang.It startled Nancy out of a deep sleep as she jumped up to answer.She then picked up the translucent deep-purple cordless phone that was on the glossed,cherry wood two-drawer nightstand."Hello?"Nancy said sleepily."Oh Nancy,sorry to wake you up but we just discovered something interesting."It was Frank and Joe Hardy.Frank was the one speaking on the phone."What is it Frank?What's so interesting?And where's Joe?"Nancy asked suddenly awoke at the sound of this.
"We were doing some research on the internet about a castle in England called The Smith Castle.Supposedly King Johnson Smith the third had some gold stashed away in a secret room.Someone found it once shortly after the King died in 1513.But it was stolen three years after being discovered by one of the Kings servants.Wer'e going to fly to England tonight and wanted to know if you would like to come.We are going to stay in a nice but affordable suite called Chambrolay five blocks away from the castle.For the plane it is seven-hundred dollars per person,and the suite cost one-hundred dollars a night.It's worth the money,though.It's really nice."Frank's voice sounded full of excitement.
"And to answer your question about Joe,he's outside washing our brand new blue sports car that mom and dad just bought us."Frank said exitedly without taking a single breath."When did you get a sports car?"Nancy asked trying to hide the giggle in her voice but failed."We just got it last month and Joe has already gotten it dirty.So that's the privilage of being the older brother.I made him wash it.Only because he dirtied it.If we both would have dirtied it,i'd be outside helping him."Frank replied with laughter in his voice."Really?You'd help him?"Nancy asked curiously."No."Frank said.Nancy stifled a giggle over the phone,and this time succeeding.
"So are you coming with us?"Frank asked eagerly."Sounds like we have another mystery on our hands.Gee,I'd love to,Frank,but it's really short notice and I don't know if I can afford paying for it and the suite and all.I'll call you back in a few minutes and let you know if I can g
kay?"Nancy asked."Okay,let me know what you come up with.Bye Nance."Frank said dissapointedly.Nancy set the cordless phone back on the nightstand inside the matching charger. She stood up and wen't to take a hot five minute shower before breakfast.It refreshed her and woke her up instantaneously.She got dressed into a pair of worn,indigo bell bottom jeans,a pair of hot pink sneakers,and a casual,long sleeved pale blue v-neck shirt.
Nancy walked downstairs and into the considerably large kitchen for breakfast and ran into Hannah,the house keeper.
"Hello,Nancy.How was your sleep?"Hannah asked."I had a good nights sleep.I got a phone call this morning from the Hardy boys asking me if i'd like to fly to England tonight to help them search for the stolen gold of Smith castle."Nancy replied."Ooh Nancy,sounds like another case your working on."Hannah said excitedly."Well,yes,if I can afford it and be ready on such short notice."Nancy said.
"Well Nancy,how much is it?"Hannah asked."Seven-hundred dollars per person for one trip on the plane.And the Chambrolay suite costs one-hundred dollars a night.It's an expense isn't it Hannah?I mean,think about it.The plane trip back,depending how many nights I stay at the Chambrolay.All the total of that could add up to over two-thousand dollars,Hannah."Nancy replied."Nancy,hun,have you forgotten your father is a lawyer?They make good money."Hannah said confidently.
Just then Carson Drew walked through the front door just in time for breakfast."Hi dad."Nancy said enthusiastically."Hello,Nancy.Hi there,Hannah."Carson said."Well hello Carson."Hannah replied.Carson gave Nancy and Hannah a hug."Come on you two,I just finished breakfast.I made eggs,pankakes,and toast for all of us."Hannah said proudly.They all sat down on the small spruce wood table.Hannah set down the ceramic antique,deep green plates and the silver forks on the small,round table.Nancy broke the silence.
"So dad where were you?"Nancy asked."I was nextdoor talking to Mr.Brown about his painting services and wondered if he'd redo the kitchen for us in a soft,creamy yellow color in glazed paint.You know,the kind you can actually clean."Carson laughed as he said that."That's nice dad.Um...Can I ask you something?"Nancy asked."Sure sweetheart."Carson replied to his daughter in a loving,fatherly tone of voice."The Hardy boys called this morning.They wanted me to fly to England with them tonight to investigate an old castle and try to find the gold that was discovered by one of the King's servant's in 1513 after he died but it was stolen three years later after the King's death.I know it's a great expense but I really wan't to get to the bottom of this and find the gold."Nancy said in one breath."Just how much will this cost,Nancy?"Carson asked suspiciously."It could add up to possibly over two-thousand dollars.The plane cost seven-hundred dollars for one trip and the Chambrolay suite were we will stay,costs one-hundred dollars a night."Nancy said solemnly and sadly thinking her father would not let her go.She sighed."Well,alright you can g
n one condition."Carson said as if he were counting to three."What condition dad?"Nancy asked with extreme eagerness."You have to call me everyday and let me know what's going on."Carson laughed."Thanks dad!But how will you cover the expense?"Nancy asked."I have the all the money I need,Nancy.I can afford it easily."Carson simply explained."Alright.I'll go call the Hardy boys and tell them i'm coming with them."Nancy said with a skip in her step.She hurredly ran up the stairs. First she called Bess and George to let them know she was on another case.Bess picked up the phone."Oh hi Nan(she had caller id),What's going on?"Bess said happily."You'll never guess where i'm going!"Nancy said like she was hiding a childish secret."The lit up city streets of Chicago?The rugged mountains of Colorado?The sandy beaches of Florida?The busy bustling streets of New York?"Bess said trying to guess."She didn't mean it litteraly,Bess."George said."Oh hi George!How are you?"Nancy asked with excitement."I'm good.I was listening to Bess constantly try to guess where you were going this time, Nan.You sure kept her in suspense."George said and giggled."Guys,i'm going to England to find some gold that a King had stashed away but one of his servants had found the gold after the kings death in 1513.Then it was stolen three years later.I'm going with the Hardy boys!"Nancy said."Wow Nancy,I never thought you would have to deal with a case halfway across the world."Bess said."Wer'e really going to miss you Nancy."George said sadly.
"You guys,it's not like i'm moving there.I might stay for a week or two."Nancy said sympethetically."Well alright,I guess that's not so bad.We can live with that,right George?"Bess asked."Yeah,I guess.So you better get packing Nancy.You don't wan't to miss your plane."George said with encouragment."Okay,bye guys.But can you do me a tiny favor?"Nancy asked hesitantly."What?" George asked."Can you guys call Ned for me and tell him what's going on and that i'll call him when I get to England?"Nancy asked."Sure Nancy.We'll let him know everything.But call us when your there.Bye."Bess said as she hung up the phone.
I have to call the Hardy boys,I almost forgot,Nancy thought.
She dialed the number."Hello?"It was Joe speaking this time."Hi Joe!Tell Frank i'm going to England with you guys.Iv'e gotta pack.See ya there!"Nancy said."Bye,Nance!"Joe said excitedly.Nancy hung the phone up and put it in it's rightful place.
Now to pack,Nancy thought.Nancy grabbed her large,beige,floral print suite case out of the walk in closet."I need to pack enough clothes for two weeks maybe three weeks tops."Nancy said to herself.
Nancy had a feeling she would not really need it all,but she had to be prepared.She packed seventeen casual shirts,five pairs of jeans,five pairs of shorts,five pairs of shoes,and pajamas and such.This should be more than plenty,she thought.Nancy then wen't to the large bathroom that she could access from in her room.She grabbed all the hygiene products she would need,and then organized it in a small,pale blue leather overnight bag.She washed her face,put on some makeup,and put some copper-light red lowlights in her hair from the lowlight kit she bought.It matched her red-blond hair.It did take a few minutes,though.
By the time Nancy was finished,she ran downstairs with her luggage and loaded it in her purple convertible.Then she wen't inside for lunch.Hannah made a turkey sandwhich and a salad for Nancy.Nancy sat down to eat."Thanks,Hannah."She remarked."Your welcome Nancy."Hannah said.Hannah was grateful that they appreciated her.Nancy gulped her food up in less than five minutes then ran to tell her father and Hannah goodbye."By dad!By Hannah!"She called.She wen't to give them both hugs."Call me if you ever need anything Nancy."Carson said."Goodbye sweetheart!"Hannah said."Here is my credit card to purchase the tickets and pay for the suite and anything else."Carson told his daughter."Thanks dad.I'll call you when i'm there."Nancy said as she gave them both kisses on the cheek.
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Chapter two:Off to the airport,On to the plane,And off to England...
Nancy stepped out the front door to her purple convertible.It began to rain slightly.She closed the roof of her convertible before she,and the interior of her car,were soaked.She was thankful that she had that kind of roof.She could have it down when the sun was out,and up when the rain was in.The airport was nearly an hour and a half away from River Heights.That's why Nancy had gotten going alot earlier than if she would have lived close to the airport.
Then she began to try to imagine what England would appear like in real life.She'd seen pictures of it,but never had visited it.She pictured it with busy streets,unlike her quiet little town of River Heights.
Nancy's drive on the way to the airport was going smooth.
Until,a mysterious figure in a black mask appeared in the middle of the road and threw railroad track nails into the road!"Oh my gosh!"Nancy cried out loud.Her sky blue eyes opened as wide as saucer cups upon her face.Nancy swerved to miss hitting the figure and the nails by driving on the side of the road but managed to bust one tire.She parked her car on the grassy side of the road."Who was that!Oh great,my tires busted!"Nancy said angrily to herself.Good thing I have a spare in the trunk,She thought.Nancy opened the trunk with her set of keys and brought out the spare.She just happened to have the few tools she needed to attach the spare.After a few tries,Nancy was able to attach the spare.It took her half an hour.She felt as if someone was watching her from behind the woods.She then drove a few feet on the grassy side road to get ahead of where the nails were,then got back on the road."I wonder what that was all about."Nancy muttered to herself in awe.
After about an hour of driving,the airport came into Nancy's view.
She took a right at the Delta parking terminal then a left at long term parking.She parked and then walked inside to purchase her tickets to England.She walked up to the desk where tickets could be purchased.She waited in line for atleast five minutes.
"Hello,I need one ticket to the next flight to England please."Nancy said politly as she handed her father's credit card to the short,stocky woman with chin lenth red hair and sparkling green eyes."Here ya go Missy."The woman replied with a spring in her step.She handed Nancy all she needed to board the plane.And of course returned Nancy smiled at the nice woman and began to walk off and head to where she needed to wait for the next plane coming in an hour.
When she got to her spot to sit down,she spotted the Hardy boys."Hey look Frank it's Nancy!"Joe cried out loudly."Joe,lower your voice.I know it's Nancy."Frank was playing a good role of big brother,considering he was Joe's big brother.
"Hey Nancy what's up?"Frank asked positively.Before Nancy could tell them what happened on the way to the airport,Joe interupted."Yeah,we were afraid you woudn't make it."Joe said."You'll never guess what happened to me on the way here."Nancy said."What happened?"Frank asked her."Well,I was just driving on the way here,you know,minding my own bussiness when a weird,mysterious figure in a black mask jumped out in the road and threw railroad track nails into the road!I managed to swerve and miss hitting the mysterious figure and most of the nails,but busted a tire and had to attach the spare."Nancy replied."Wow,Nancy,I wonder what it was about and who it was."Joe said."I don't know Joe,but whoever it was must have known who I was and where I was flying to."Nancy said suspiciously."Weird,Nancy.I'm glad you were okay."Frank said with concern filled in his voice."Thanks,Frank.I'm glad i'm okay too."Nancy said laughing.
"We need to put our luggage on the conveyer belt so it's put in the luggage compartment."Nancy said.They swiftly walked over to the large conveyer belt where other people were standing to board the same plane.Nancy quikly put her luggage on the quikly moving conveyer belt.Frank did the same as Nancy.Joe tried to do the same as the other two,but accidently put his luggage on some man's overnight bag squishing it and all it's content.
The man frowned at Joe.Joe quikly gave him a*I'm sorry.It was not on purpose please forgive me*look.It was funny.
All of the Sudden,Nancy saw a familiar face.The mysterious figure with the black mask!She actually made eye contact with him/her.It was funny that no one stared at the person dressed like that.Maybe only Nancy could see him/her.But that would mean it was a ghost!Nancy quikly dissmissed this thought as she thought it was rediculous.
The three then walked back to there seats just in time to board the plane.They heard their number called,walked to the desk and submitted the tickets,walked through the incredibly long entryway,and they got on the plane.Thankfully,the three of them sat in the middle of the plane in the same row which consisted of three plane seats.Therefore they were able to sit together.Nancy sat in the middle,Frank on the right,and Joe on the left.The plane began to take off and Nancy felt as if she would pass out.She breathed in and out slowly and she felt alot better.
Nancy saw the mysterious figure seated at the left seating arrangement just across from Joe.He/She was staring at Nancy and gave her a cold look from what she could see of the person.
The flight was to last five hours.Good thing the Hardy boys brought their laptop with internet service to do some more research about the Smith Castle and England for on the plane or the three would have been bored.Internet Service for flying was outragously priced.She didn't know where the Hardy boys got the money for it.She new they worked for A.T.A.C,but didn't think they got payed for their job.
Finally,the airline hostess came got around to Nancy,Joe,and Frank.She was a tall,slim,tan,brunette with dazzling violet eyes that would sparkle enough to make you faint.She then asked each of them what they would like to drink and have for a snack.She started with Joe,then Nancy,then Frank."What would you like to drink and snack on?"She asked Joe."C-C-C-Coca C-Cola p-please and a b-bag of of of...s-s-un ch-chips. "He stammered.He was blushing to a deep red,he embarrassed himself.It was really funny when he stammered.I think he thought she was pretty,Nancy thought,laughing inside."And what would you like?"She asked Nancy."A chocolate chip granola bar to eat and water to drink please."Nancy said happily.She then moved on to Frank."And what can I get for you?"She asked Frank."Sprite to drink and cheese crackers please."Frank replied.She handed them all what they asked for,but when she handed Joe his coke,he was shaking and speechless.His hand shook and he spilled some coke.The airline hostess wiped it up,winked at Joe,waved goodbye to Frank,then moved on.
The three entertained themselves with the research,then Joe decided to take a nap.He was snoring loudly.Then the airline hostess that served the three passed by Joe laughing and looking at him.If Joe found this out,he'd be truly embarassed.He'd had enough of that for the day.So Frank and Nancy decided not to tell him.
Then Frank fell asleep.He didn't snore though.This suprised Nancy.She got onto the laptop to do some research by herself on the Smith Castle and England.She found some interesting things out.She found out that the Kings son,Alexander Smith,that took his father's place after he died,had the servant placed in a dungeon for life for discovering the secret room with the gold in it.I wonder why they locked him up,there may be important clues in that secret room,I have got to get inside it somehow if I knew where it's location was inside the castle,Nancy thought.
Nancy set the laptop down and decided to get some rest.
Nancy awoke with Frank saying"Wake up Nancy.Were here.Wake up!"Frank hissed.Nancy suddenly noticted and awoke with a jump.The plane began to land,as Nancy felt a sudden drop in height.The plane took a few minutes to totally land on the runway.It was loud as the wheels hit the runway.
Nancy decided to wake up Joe."Hey,Joe.Wake up.Youv'e been sleeping for hours."Nancy whispered.Joe woke up instantly."Hey Nancy.Are we here yet?"Joe asked sleepily."Yep."Nancy replied.
They waited for the people start to clear off the plane then made their way towards the front.The mysterious figure pushed pass the three and got off the plane before Nancy could get a good look.They then stepped off the plane,and made their way through the entrance passagway leading to the England airport.
It was a large,elegant airport.So large,it seemed as if the square feet to it were endless.It was extremely crowded,that Nancy could barely take a few steps at a time.Gee,people must come back and forth from England alot,Nancy thought.
Joe and Frank were hungry and decided to go eat somewhere in the airport."Hey Nancy,me and Joe are gonna go to checkers and get a couple cheese burgers.Wan't to come or wan't us to bring you something?"Frank asked."Thanks for the tempting offer,but no thanks.I have other things on my agenda.I'll meet you at checkers in forty-five minutes.But do me a favor.Could you guys pick me up a salad somewhere?"Nancy asked."Sure Nance.See ya."Frank replied.It was seven o' clock pm.So Nancy knew she had to meet them there at seven forty-five.She had sluething to do.To find the mysterious person and follow them around.Nancy traced her steps from where she was so she would find checkers.
She was walking for about five minutes and suddenly spotted the stocker a.k.a mysterious person.He/She was speaking secretly with a suspicious looking man.Nancy hid behind the corner of the wall and listened in."Now,here's what I wan't you to do.I wan't you to lock her up in the secret room.I don't wan't her getting to the gold before I do."It was a man with a heavy New York accent."Okay Daniel,consider it done."It was another man speaking,only this one had an English accent.Nancy new just who they were speaking about with no doubts.They were speaking about her!
Nancy stepped out the front door to her purple convertible.It began to rain slightly.She closed the roof of her convertible before she,and the interior of her car,were soaked.She was thankful that she had that kind of roof.She could have it down when the sun was out,and up when the rain was in.The airport was nearly an hour and a half away from River Heights.That's why Nancy had gotten going alot earlier than if she would have lived close to the airport.
Then she began to try to imagine what England would appear like in real life.She'd seen pictures of it,but never had visited it.She pictured it with busy streets,unlike her quiet little town of River Heights.
Nancy's drive on the way to the airport was going smooth.
Until,a mysterious figure in a black mask appeared in the middle of the road and threw railroad track nails into the road!"Oh my gosh!"Nancy cried out loud.Her sky blue eyes opened as wide as saucer cups upon her face.Nancy swerved to miss hitting the figure and the nails by driving on the side of the road but managed to bust one tire.She parked her car on the grassy side of the road."Who was that!Oh great,my tires busted!"Nancy said angrily to herself.Good thing I have a spare in the trunk,She thought.Nancy opened the trunk with her set of keys and brought out the spare.She just happened to have the few tools she needed to attach the spare.After a few tries,Nancy was able to attach the spare.It took her half an hour.She felt as if someone was watching her from behind the woods.She then drove a few feet on the grassy side road to get ahead of where the nails were,then got back on the road."I wonder what that was all about."Nancy muttered to herself in awe.
After about an hour of driving,the airport came into Nancy's view.
She took a right at the Delta parking terminal then a left at long term parking.She parked and then walked inside to purchase her tickets to England.She walked up to the desk where tickets could be purchased.She waited in line for atleast five minutes.
"Hello,I need one ticket to the next flight to England please."Nancy said politly as she handed her father's credit card to the short,stocky woman with chin lenth red hair and sparkling green eyes."Here ya go Missy."The woman replied with a spring in her step.She handed Nancy all she needed to board the plane.And of course returned Nancy smiled at the nice woman and began to walk off and head to where she needed to wait for the next plane coming in an hour.
When she got to her spot to sit down,she spotted the Hardy boys."Hey look Frank it's Nancy!"Joe cried out loudly."Joe,lower your voice.I know it's Nancy."Frank was playing a good role of big brother,considering he was Joe's big brother.
"Hey Nancy what's up?"Frank asked positively.Before Nancy could tell them what happened on the way to the airport,Joe interupted."Yeah,we were afraid you woudn't make it."Joe said."You'll never guess what happened to me on the way here."Nancy said."What happened?"Frank asked her."Well,I was just driving on the way here,you know,minding my own bussiness when a weird,mysterious figure in a black mask jumped out in the road and threw railroad track nails into the road!I managed to swerve and miss hitting the mysterious figure and most of the nails,but busted a tire and had to attach the spare."Nancy replied."Wow,Nancy,I wonder what it was about and who it was."Joe said."I don't know Joe,but whoever it was must have known who I was and where I was flying to."Nancy said suspiciously."Weird,Nancy.I'm glad you were okay."Frank said with concern filled in his voice."Thanks,Frank.I'm glad i'm okay too."Nancy said laughing.
"We need to put our luggage on the conveyer belt so it's put in the luggage compartment."Nancy said.They swiftly walked over to the large conveyer belt where other people were standing to board the same plane.Nancy quikly put her luggage on the quikly moving conveyer belt.Frank did the same as Nancy.Joe tried to do the same as the other two,but accidently put his luggage on some man's overnight bag squishing it and all it's content.
The man frowned at Joe.Joe quikly gave him a*I'm sorry.It was not on purpose please forgive me*look.It was funny.
All of the Sudden,Nancy saw a familiar face.The mysterious figure with the black mask!She actually made eye contact with him/her.It was funny that no one stared at the person dressed like that.Maybe only Nancy could see him/her.But that would mean it was a ghost!Nancy quikly dissmissed this thought as she thought it was rediculous.
The three then walked back to there seats just in time to board the plane.They heard their number called,walked to the desk and submitted the tickets,walked through the incredibly long entryway,and they got on the plane.Thankfully,the three of them sat in the middle of the plane in the same row which consisted of three plane seats.Therefore they were able to sit together.Nancy sat in the middle,Frank on the right,and Joe on the left.The plane began to take off and Nancy felt as if she would pass out.She breathed in and out slowly and she felt alot better.
Nancy saw the mysterious figure seated at the left seating arrangement just across from Joe.He/She was staring at Nancy and gave her a cold look from what she could see of the person.
The flight was to last five hours.Good thing the Hardy boys brought their laptop with internet service to do some more research about the Smith Castle and England for on the plane or the three would have been bored.Internet Service for flying was outragously priced.She didn't know where the Hardy boys got the money for it.She new they worked for A.T.A.C,but didn't think they got payed for their job.
Finally,the airline hostess came got around to Nancy,Joe,and Frank.She was a tall,slim,tan,brunette with dazzling violet eyes that would sparkle enough to make you faint.She then asked each of them what they would like to drink and have for a snack.She started with Joe,then Nancy,then Frank."What would you like to drink and snack on?"She asked Joe."C-C-C-Coca C-Cola p-please and a b-bag of of of...s-s-un ch-chips. "He stammered.He was blushing to a deep red,he embarrassed himself.It was really funny when he stammered.I think he thought she was pretty,Nancy thought,laughing inside."And what would you like?"She asked Nancy."A chocolate chip granola bar to eat and water to drink please."Nancy said happily.She then moved on to Frank."And what can I get for you?"She asked Frank."Sprite to drink and cheese crackers please."Frank replied.She handed them all what they asked for,but when she handed Joe his coke,he was shaking and speechless.His hand shook and he spilled some coke.The airline hostess wiped it up,winked at Joe,waved goodbye to Frank,then moved on.
The three entertained themselves with the research,then Joe decided to take a nap.He was snoring loudly.Then the airline hostess that served the three passed by Joe laughing and looking at him.If Joe found this out,he'd be truly embarassed.He'd had enough of that for the day.So Frank and Nancy decided not to tell him.
Then Frank fell asleep.He didn't snore though.This suprised Nancy.She got onto the laptop to do some research by herself on the Smith Castle and England.She found some interesting things out.She found out that the Kings son,Alexander Smith,that took his father's place after he died,had the servant placed in a dungeon for life for discovering the secret room with the gold in it.I wonder why they locked him up,there may be important clues in that secret room,I have got to get inside it somehow if I knew where it's location was inside the castle,Nancy thought.
Nancy set the laptop down and decided to get some rest.
Nancy awoke with Frank saying"Wake up Nancy.Were here.Wake up!"Frank hissed.Nancy suddenly noticted and awoke with a jump.The plane began to land,as Nancy felt a sudden drop in height.The plane took a few minutes to totally land on the runway.It was loud as the wheels hit the runway.
Nancy decided to wake up Joe."Hey,Joe.Wake up.Youv'e been sleeping for hours."Nancy whispered.Joe woke up instantly."Hey Nancy.Are we here yet?"Joe asked sleepily."Yep."Nancy replied.
They waited for the people start to clear off the plane then made their way towards the front.The mysterious figure pushed pass the three and got off the plane before Nancy could get a good look.They then stepped off the plane,and made their way through the entrance passagway leading to the England airport.
It was a large,elegant airport.So large,it seemed as if the square feet to it were endless.It was extremely crowded,that Nancy could barely take a few steps at a time.Gee,people must come back and forth from England alot,Nancy thought.
Joe and Frank were hungry and decided to go eat somewhere in the airport."Hey Nancy,me and Joe are gonna go to checkers and get a couple cheese burgers.Wan't to come or wan't us to bring you something?"Frank asked."Thanks for the tempting offer,but no thanks.I have other things on my agenda.I'll meet you at checkers in forty-five minutes.But do me a favor.Could you guys pick me up a salad somewhere?"Nancy asked."Sure Nance.See ya."Frank replied.It was seven o' clock pm.So Nancy knew she had to meet them there at seven forty-five.She had sluething to do.To find the mysterious person and follow them around.Nancy traced her steps from where she was so she would find checkers.
She was walking for about five minutes and suddenly spotted the stocker a.k.a mysterious person.He/She was speaking secretly with a suspicious looking man.Nancy hid behind the corner of the wall and listened in."Now,here's what I wan't you to do.I wan't you to lock her up in the secret room.I don't wan't her getting to the gold before I do."It was a man with a heavy New York accent."Okay Daniel,consider it done."It was another man speaking,only this one had an English accent.Nancy new just who they were speaking about with no doubts.They were speaking about her!
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Chapter three:Watch your back Nancy...
Nancy had to watch her back 24/7 now.If she didn't,her life could be at stake!Nancy didn't know what to do!She thought for about two minutes,then hatched a plan.She quikly turned the corner to get a good look at the two men.That wasn't exactly what she should have done.The two men spotted her.They started to chase her.She began to run through the airport.She had to find a way to lose them.As she was running and they were chasing after her,people were staring at them.Figures,I mean it is kind of odd to see a person being chased by two people in public view,Iv'e got to lose them,Nancy thought.She spotted a counter at a chinease resturant she could hide behind where they would not see her jump behind it.Nancy quikly made way behind the counter.She peeked up slightly above the counter to find that the men were still running up ahead.Nancy decided it would be best if she stayed behind the counter for atleast ten minutes.Then she thought of something.Wouldn't the employees think it was odd that she was hiding behind the counter?Slowly,she turned around to face a manager staring at her coldly with his ice blue eyes."Who are you and what do you wan't?"The man with an English accent screamed at her."I,w-was being chased by two men and had to hide behind this counter so they wouldn't find me."Nancy stammered.The man's expression suddenly softened extremely."We'll,as long as you weren't trying to steal any supplies."The man said.His tone had softened as well."Oh,no sir,I would never steal.Do you think maybe I could stay behind this counter for about ten more minutes?I don't think they'll be coming back.The airport is endless.They will never find me."Nancy asked reluctantly."We'll,alright,just don't bother any of the my employees.They work here you know."The man said with slight anger in his voice.Wow,that was easy,Nancy thought.For about ten minutes,she sat down on the floor behind the counter,watching employees serve their comtomers.Then,it was time to leave.Nancy ran over to thank the man."Thank you so much."Nancy said appreciatevly."Your welcome."The man said.Nancy walked out from beneath the counter and looked left and right,just to make sure the two men were not watching her.
They were no were in sight.Great,I lost em,She thought happily and cleverly,knowing she was genius.
As Nancy walked,she thought of how the men could have known what she'd come to England for.Daniel,the man in the black mask,must have known Nancy was famous for solving mysteries.Therefore,he must have been from River Heights!
Nancy thought for a moment and tried to think if she really actually had met Daniel in person.Yes!Why,that was one of her dad's friends!Daniel must have paid a visit to her dad after she'd left for the airport.Her dad must have told him what Nancy was going to England for,then Daniel must have wanted to learn more about finding this gold.So he drove up somewhere along near the airport and got there quiker than Nancy by taking an illegal shortcut,parked his car in a hidden place,then prepared to try to stop Nancy from catching the plane for England!Nancy had to admit the plan was devious and smart,but it didn't fool her.
Nancy decided to meet the Hardy Boys earlier than planned.She had to walk all the way back to where she started,then spotted the Hardy boys at checkers dumping their trash in a nearbye trashcan.She ran over to them,but decided not to mention what happened earlier."Hey Nancy,ready to go already?"Frank asked."Yep.I'm not very hungry though.I'll eat when we get to the hotel."Nancy said."Hey Frank,we have to rent a car and grab our luggage."Joe said reminding him."Right."Frank said remembering,blushing at the fact that he'd forgotten.He was always the brother to keep everything organized.After a few minutes of searching,they found the conveyer belt and picked up their bags.
Then they ran over to Hertz car renting company to rent a car.While Frank filled things out in order to pay for the car and ren't it,Nancy and Joe found something to talk about."So,how did you two discover this?"Nancy asked."We'll,one day I was surfing the net for information on castle's for a school report,when I came across it,and then I called Frank and he took it into his own hands saying we should go."Joe replied.
Frank then motioned a come along.The tall,brown-eyed blond woman at the
desk handed Frank the key to the rental car.
Nancy and Joe ran and caught up with Frank.They walked out of the large,crowded airport at last."Alright,we need to find number seventy-three."Frank muttered to himself.He was very consentrated on finding the car."Oh over there.There's our car."Frank said.They all walked over to it and got a good look at it.I was a nissan car.It was suprisingly a creamy,medium purple color and had a sporty structure."Can I drive?"Nancy asked Frank."Sure Nancy."Frank replied.They all put their bags in the trunk of the car and got in.Nancy started the car and backed out cautiously."Okay,so which way do I go Frank?"Nancy asked as she drove incredibly slow.They were just about out of the parking lot and needed to turn left to exit."Go ahead and turn left to exit,then go right and keep on going straight till' you reach a street called Brown Street.Then once you turn on Brown Street,take the first left.That will lead us to the Chambrolay Suites.We can unpack,then eat dinner,and check out the Smith Castle and all it's history.We just gotta solve this Nancy."Frank replied.They all kept silent the whole ride.It took about twenty minutes to reach Brown Street.Nancy turned onto it and took the first left like Frank told her to.Thankfully,Nancy found a parking space near the front of the huge,elegant,stately suite.
"Wow!It's really elegant."Nancy said as she stared in awe at the huge building."Yeah,we kind of forgot to tell you it was huge."Joe said,laughing.
As the three stepped out of the car to get there belongings from the trunk,a talkative,jittery,nervous man walked up to them to grab their luggage.He was almost like a private chaffour."Hello,may I grab your things for you?Would you like me to?"The man asked nervously."Sure."Nancy replied smiling.The man grabbed their things,which was suprisingly not much,and the man was suprisingly strong.Nancy was suprised he did not have an English accent.He was a short man with golden brown hair,twinkling blue eyes,tan skin,and wore a black tuxedo.Nancy noticed he wore a staff tag and noted the man's odd name'Estaban'.The man was not very confident around people,and it seemed as if his boss treated him like a slave.It was obvious.You can always tell if someone is treated like a doormat.Estaban seemed like he had to please everyone else,and wait on them.Poor guy,Nancy thought.As they started towards the entrance of the suite,Estaban began to tell them the history of the Chambrolay.Nancy listened carefully.
"The Chambrolay Suite was built in 1808,and it's history contains a connection with the Smith Castle.The founder named Brewster Smith of the Chambrolay was a descendent of royalty that ruled all of England.He had a cousin named Frances Smith,who became the King of England because Brewster already had enough on his hands with taking care of the suite,and raising a family.Brewster Smith was next in line to be King of England,as he had been a direct descendant of Kings and queens over the ages.Brewster and Frances were very close,and were the best of friends.They told each other everything from their opinions,to what the personal things in life.It was always said that the two may have found the lost/stolen gold,and kept it a secret."Estaban finally finished just in time as they reached the hotel entrance.
I wonder if there are any clues in the Chambrolay at to where the treasure is,Nancy thought.The four of them walked inside the large,and suprisingly extremely decorative suite.Nancy,Frank,and Joe stared in aw of the Renisance decorations.Most of them appeared to be old,and others,not.Estaban set the luggage down,bowed,and stepped away.Nancy,Frank,and Joe grabbed their luggage and set off to find their rooms,then tidy up for dinner.They walked up to the front desk to check in,and the elderly man with a Boston accent gave them the pass keys to the rooms.Nancy was 207,which meant she was on the second floor,and Joe and Frank were in room 112,meaning they were probably on the first floor.
Nancy had to watch her back 24/7 now.If she didn't,her life could be at stake!Nancy didn't know what to do!She thought for about two minutes,then hatched a plan.She quikly turned the corner to get a good look at the two men.That wasn't exactly what she should have done.The two men spotted her.They started to chase her.She began to run through the airport.She had to find a way to lose them.As she was running and they were chasing after her,people were staring at them.Figures,I mean it is kind of odd to see a person being chased by two people in public view,Iv'e got to lose them,Nancy thought.She spotted a counter at a chinease resturant she could hide behind where they would not see her jump behind it.Nancy quikly made way behind the counter.She peeked up slightly above the counter to find that the men were still running up ahead.Nancy decided it would be best if she stayed behind the counter for atleast ten minutes.Then she thought of something.Wouldn't the employees think it was odd that she was hiding behind the counter?Slowly,she turned around to face a manager staring at her coldly with his ice blue eyes."Who are you and what do you wan't?"The man with an English accent screamed at her."I,w-was being chased by two men and had to hide behind this counter so they wouldn't find me."Nancy stammered.The man's expression suddenly softened extremely."We'll,as long as you weren't trying to steal any supplies."The man said.His tone had softened as well."Oh,no sir,I would never steal.Do you think maybe I could stay behind this counter for about ten more minutes?I don't think they'll be coming back.The airport is endless.They will never find me."Nancy asked reluctantly."We'll,alright,just don't bother any of the my employees.They work here you know."The man said with slight anger in his voice.Wow,that was easy,Nancy thought.For about ten minutes,she sat down on the floor behind the counter,watching employees serve their comtomers.Then,it was time to leave.Nancy ran over to thank the man."Thank you so much."Nancy said appreciatevly."Your welcome."The man said.Nancy walked out from beneath the counter and looked left and right,just to make sure the two men were not watching her.
They were no were in sight.Great,I lost em,She thought happily and cleverly,knowing she was genius.
As Nancy walked,she thought of how the men could have known what she'd come to England for.Daniel,the man in the black mask,must have known Nancy was famous for solving mysteries.Therefore,he must have been from River Heights!
Nancy thought for a moment and tried to think if she really actually had met Daniel in person.Yes!Why,that was one of her dad's friends!Daniel must have paid a visit to her dad after she'd left for the airport.Her dad must have told him what Nancy was going to England for,then Daniel must have wanted to learn more about finding this gold.So he drove up somewhere along near the airport and got there quiker than Nancy by taking an illegal shortcut,parked his car in a hidden place,then prepared to try to stop Nancy from catching the plane for England!Nancy had to admit the plan was devious and smart,but it didn't fool her.
Nancy decided to meet the Hardy Boys earlier than planned.She had to walk all the way back to where she started,then spotted the Hardy boys at checkers dumping their trash in a nearbye trashcan.She ran over to them,but decided not to mention what happened earlier."Hey Nancy,ready to go already?"Frank asked."Yep.I'm not very hungry though.I'll eat when we get to the hotel."Nancy said."Hey Frank,we have to rent a car and grab our luggage."Joe said reminding him."Right."Frank said remembering,blushing at the fact that he'd forgotten.He was always the brother to keep everything organized.After a few minutes of searching,they found the conveyer belt and picked up their bags.
Then they ran over to Hertz car renting company to rent a car.While Frank filled things out in order to pay for the car and ren't it,Nancy and Joe found something to talk about."So,how did you two discover this?"Nancy asked."We'll,one day I was surfing the net for information on castle's for a school report,when I came across it,and then I called Frank and he took it into his own hands saying we should go."Joe replied.
Frank then motioned a come along.The tall,brown-eyed blond woman at the
desk handed Frank the key to the rental car.
Nancy and Joe ran and caught up with Frank.They walked out of the large,crowded airport at last."Alright,we need to find number seventy-three."Frank muttered to himself.He was very consentrated on finding the car."Oh over there.There's our car."Frank said.They all walked over to it and got a good look at it.I was a nissan car.It was suprisingly a creamy,medium purple color and had a sporty structure."Can I drive?"Nancy asked Frank."Sure Nancy."Frank replied.They all put their bags in the trunk of the car and got in.Nancy started the car and backed out cautiously."Okay,so which way do I go Frank?"Nancy asked as she drove incredibly slow.They were just about out of the parking lot and needed to turn left to exit."Go ahead and turn left to exit,then go right and keep on going straight till' you reach a street called Brown Street.Then once you turn on Brown Street,take the first left.That will lead us to the Chambrolay Suites.We can unpack,then eat dinner,and check out the Smith Castle and all it's history.We just gotta solve this Nancy."Frank replied.They all kept silent the whole ride.It took about twenty minutes to reach Brown Street.Nancy turned onto it and took the first left like Frank told her to.Thankfully,Nancy found a parking space near the front of the huge,elegant,stately suite.
"Wow!It's really elegant."Nancy said as she stared in awe at the huge building."Yeah,we kind of forgot to tell you it was huge."Joe said,laughing.
As the three stepped out of the car to get there belongings from the trunk,a talkative,jittery,nervous man walked up to them to grab their luggage.He was almost like a private chaffour."Hello,may I grab your things for you?Would you like me to?"The man asked nervously."Sure."Nancy replied smiling.The man grabbed their things,which was suprisingly not much,and the man was suprisingly strong.Nancy was suprised he did not have an English accent.He was a short man with golden brown hair,twinkling blue eyes,tan skin,and wore a black tuxedo.Nancy noticed he wore a staff tag and noted the man's odd name'Estaban'.The man was not very confident around people,and it seemed as if his boss treated him like a slave.It was obvious.You can always tell if someone is treated like a doormat.Estaban seemed like he had to please everyone else,and wait on them.Poor guy,Nancy thought.As they started towards the entrance of the suite,Estaban began to tell them the history of the Chambrolay.Nancy listened carefully.
"The Chambrolay Suite was built in 1808,and it's history contains a connection with the Smith Castle.The founder named Brewster Smith of the Chambrolay was a descendent of royalty that ruled all of England.He had a cousin named Frances Smith,who became the King of England because Brewster already had enough on his hands with taking care of the suite,and raising a family.Brewster Smith was next in line to be King of England,as he had been a direct descendant of Kings and queens over the ages.Brewster and Frances were very close,and were the best of friends.They told each other everything from their opinions,to what the personal things in life.It was always said that the two may have found the lost/stolen gold,and kept it a secret."Estaban finally finished just in time as they reached the hotel entrance.
I wonder if there are any clues in the Chambrolay at to where the treasure is,Nancy thought.The four of them walked inside the large,and suprisingly extremely decorative suite.Nancy,Frank,and Joe stared in aw of the Renisance decorations.Most of them appeared to be old,and others,not.Estaban set the luggage down,bowed,and stepped away.Nancy,Frank,and Joe grabbed their luggage and set off to find their rooms,then tidy up for dinner.They walked up to the front desk to check in,and the elderly man with a Boston accent gave them the pass keys to the rooms.Nancy was 207,which meant she was on the second floor,and Joe and Frank were in room 112,meaning they were probably on the first floor.
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This is part of the other book i'm writing.The characters,and the plotline are completely original.Enjoy!
Running from murderers and thieves
Anne Marie Potter Scuttled about the dusty wood floor with a broom in hand.
She was doing her daily chores around the victorian mansion.Anne was a servant
girl and had not much to offer accept cleaning and dusting.She wore a torn long-
sleeved dress that she had had for years because she stopped growing quikly.It was
her only dress she had.
Anne was of age seventeen,five foot four,with jet black hair and sparkling baby
blue eyes.She felt as if she was of no importance whatsoever to her stepmother or
the rest of the family.She was the only one who cleaned the victorian mansion from
top to bottom daily,did the laundry,and took care of the farmlife they had on the
property.Anne was always busy,never bored,because she always had something
to do.Most of all,she enjoyed reading.
Suddenly,Anne heard her stepmother Eloise yelling for her name,"Anne!Get your
lazy self in here and clean up this mess."Eloise yelled.She stepped into the room and
stared at the floor she had just cleaned,then gave Eloise a blank look."Well what are
you waiting for?Wipe it up child!"Eloise yelled.Anne looked at the floor once again.
Her step sister Chantel had spilled punch all over the formerly clean floor.Chantel
sat like a knot on a log in the pale yellow wing chair across the room from Anne.
"What happened in here Chantel?"Anne quikly questioned her."I wen't to the
parlor and got some punch,and walked in here and tripped on that book that YOU
left on the floor.It was your fault."Chantel replied snobbishly."You did that purposly!"
Anne snarled."Just clean it up and stop procrastinating!"Eloise yelled.At that,Anne
quikly cleaned it up.
Later that evening,Anne had to go into town to go buy more livestock to provide
milk as her stepmother commanded.As if they didn't have enough cows.They had
thirty-eight cows,for pete's sake,and yet Eloise just wanted more.Anne had to
meet Diego Philipps,her best friend,for the livestock.Everytime Eloise got an
overwelming urge for more cows,that's who she wen't to.As she walked the paved
city streets,she thought of how her best friend always was there for her.When her
stepmother whipped her harshly,he always snuck in some bandages and such to
cure it.He was always there.She began to think of how she was starting to like him
for more than a friend.He was two years older than her,very handsome,he had golden
brown blond hair and deep,beautiful green eyes.Whenever she saw him,she had
butterflies in her stomach.
After all this thinking,she made it to Diego before she knew it.Just then,she spotted \
a handsome,tall figure.She new it was Diego.She called out to him,"Hey,Diego,I
need some more cows."He replied,"Okay,let me go get butterscotch and fannie."
Those must have been the names of the cows.Diego had so much livestock because
his father breeded cows and also imported them from other countries.Eloise wanted
more cows a few times semi-annually because she made Anne go around all of Savannah,
Georgia selling milk to help keep money in the family.Another reason was because,
eventually the cows will get old and the cows die.So she wanted to be prepared so
it wouldn't put the milk selling out of bussiness.This was just an extra thing she did
to make the family more rich and well off.Her father,Daniel Potter,who had been the former
governer of Savannah,had died twelve years ago after he'd married that witch.
And he left behind tons of money for them.That was one reason they were rich.
Diego suddenly interuppted her thoughts when he came back with butterscotch and
fannie.He always chose names for his cows on account of how they looked.When he
brought them out,she could always tell which was which,although,he didn't know this.
"Here they are,the one on the left is butterscotch,and the one on the right is of course
fannie.
That'll mean of course,dinner for my father and I?"Diego curiously asked.
"Here ya go.I packed five slices of rye bread and chicken pot pie."Anne replied.
Whenever she needed to get cows she would repay him and his father with breakfast,
luncheon,or dinner depending on the time she wen't and because they were so busy
with their livestock that they didn't always have time to create meals.So she made
them herself.They enjoyed her deliously scrumptious cooking.She even cooked for
her family and they loved it tonly,they,her family took her for granted.Diego
wouldn't do that to her.Then,Diego suddenly spoke saying"Thank you so much and
you are always welcome here.If you ever need shelter from that witch,you can stay
here.""Well thanks for the tempting offer,Diego,i'll keep that in mind."Anne replied
thankfully.They both laughed at this and considered it witty.Anne grabbed the cows
by the rope and said,"Well i'll see you later Diego.Lemme know if you need more
food and i'll let you know when I need more cows."Anne called to him."Well,see
ya and be careful on your way back."Diego called back with a smile on his face
and blushing.
Running from murderers and thieves
Anne Marie Potter Scuttled about the dusty wood floor with a broom in hand.
She was doing her daily chores around the victorian mansion.Anne was a servant
girl and had not much to offer accept cleaning and dusting.She wore a torn long-
sleeved dress that she had had for years because she stopped growing quikly.It was
her only dress she had.
Anne was of age seventeen,five foot four,with jet black hair and sparkling baby
blue eyes.She felt as if she was of no importance whatsoever to her stepmother or
the rest of the family.She was the only one who cleaned the victorian mansion from
top to bottom daily,did the laundry,and took care of the farmlife they had on the
property.Anne was always busy,never bored,because she always had something
to do.Most of all,she enjoyed reading.
Suddenly,Anne heard her stepmother Eloise yelling for her name,"Anne!Get your
lazy self in here and clean up this mess."Eloise yelled.She stepped into the room and
stared at the floor she had just cleaned,then gave Eloise a blank look."Well what are
you waiting for?Wipe it up child!"Eloise yelled.Anne looked at the floor once again.
Her step sister Chantel had spilled punch all over the formerly clean floor.Chantel
sat like a knot on a log in the pale yellow wing chair across the room from Anne.
"What happened in here Chantel?"Anne quikly questioned her."I wen't to the
parlor and got some punch,and walked in here and tripped on that book that YOU
left on the floor.It was your fault."Chantel replied snobbishly."You did that purposly!"
Anne snarled."Just clean it up and stop procrastinating!"Eloise yelled.At that,Anne
quikly cleaned it up.
Later that evening,Anne had to go into town to go buy more livestock to provide
milk as her stepmother commanded.As if they didn't have enough cows.They had
thirty-eight cows,for pete's sake,and yet Eloise just wanted more.Anne had to
meet Diego Philipps,her best friend,for the livestock.Everytime Eloise got an
overwelming urge for more cows,that's who she wen't to.As she walked the paved
city streets,she thought of how her best friend always was there for her.When her
stepmother whipped her harshly,he always snuck in some bandages and such to
cure it.He was always there.She began to think of how she was starting to like him
for more than a friend.He was two years older than her,very handsome,he had golden
brown blond hair and deep,beautiful green eyes.Whenever she saw him,she had
butterflies in her stomach.
After all this thinking,she made it to Diego before she knew it.Just then,she spotted \
a handsome,tall figure.She new it was Diego.She called out to him,"Hey,Diego,I
need some more cows."He replied,"Okay,let me go get butterscotch and fannie."
Those must have been the names of the cows.Diego had so much livestock because
his father breeded cows and also imported them from other countries.Eloise wanted
more cows a few times semi-annually because she made Anne go around all of Savannah,
Georgia selling milk to help keep money in the family.Another reason was because,
eventually the cows will get old and the cows die.So she wanted to be prepared so
it wouldn't put the milk selling out of bussiness.This was just an extra thing she did
to make the family more rich and well off.Her father,Daniel Potter,who had been the former
governer of Savannah,had died twelve years ago after he'd married that witch.
And he left behind tons of money for them.That was one reason they were rich.
Diego suddenly interuppted her thoughts when he came back with butterscotch and
fannie.He always chose names for his cows on account of how they looked.When he
brought them out,she could always tell which was which,although,he didn't know this.
"Here they are,the one on the left is butterscotch,and the one on the right is of course
fannie.
That'll mean of course,dinner for my father and I?"Diego curiously asked.
"Here ya go.I packed five slices of rye bread and chicken pot pie."Anne replied.
Whenever she needed to get cows she would repay him and his father with breakfast,
luncheon,or dinner depending on the time she wen't and because they were so busy
with their livestock that they didn't always have time to create meals.So she made
them herself.They enjoyed her deliously scrumptious cooking.She even cooked for
her family and they loved it to
nly,they,her family took her for granted.Diego wouldn't do that to her.Then,Diego suddenly spoke saying"Thank you so much and
you are always welcome here.If you ever need shelter from that witch,you can stay
here.""Well thanks for the tempting offer,Diego,i'll keep that in mind."Anne replied
thankfully.They both laughed at this and considered it witty.Anne grabbed the cows
by the rope and said,"Well i'll see you later Diego.Lemme know if you need more
food and i'll let you know when I need more cows."Anne called to him."Well,see
ya and be careful on your way back."Diego called back with a smile on his face
and blushing.
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Chapter two:Theives and murderers on the loose
On her way home,she heard someone scream dreadfully and she turned left and
right over her shoulders too see where it came from.She saw where it was coming
from.Mrs.Thomas'home!She quikly tied the cows to a luckily nearby tree,And
rushed into the house and called for Mrs.Thomas.
"Mrs.Thomas?!Are you alright?"She called.Then there was a sudden silence in the
house.She called again."Mrs.Thomas?!"Still no answer.She suddenly noticed that
broken glass lay everywere and things were out of place.She also noticed that some
things were stolen.How'd she know that?Because she always ran errands for
Mrs.Thomas and was always coming inside her house!She then rushed upstairs.
And found Mrs.Thomas laying on the floor almost unconcious.Or so Anne thought.
She checked for pulse.No.No pulse.Mrs.Thomas was dead!Someone killed her!Anne
ran out of the room with a look of horror on her face.She searched the house for
Mrs.Thomas' children.No sign of them.They must have been kidnapped!
Anne was just about to run out and get help when she saw a shadowy figure
in the hallway,staring at her.She could not make out the features of the person
because of the darkness.Suddenly,the misteryous figure lit a match,and put it
on a trail of oil they set there purposly,and a fire started!The shadowy figure
quikly escaped through a window by smashing the glass and being lowered by
a rope.Anne had to get out quik before the fire consumed her.She quikly looked
for an escape.She ran downstairs and tried to go for the front door.Nope.It was
burning in flames.Then she remembered a secret door in the lower cabinets in
the kitchen that led out of the house.She made an attempted escape toward it.
Luckily,it was not consumed by fire.She slammed the cabinets open quikly as
possible,then pushed herself out with such great force,that she stumbled down
into the mud and scraped her arm badly.Then she hurredly ran towards the
front of the house upon the street and began to scream for help."Help!Fire!
Mrs.Thomas is dead and her children were kidnapped!Help!Somebody please!
Get some water or sand or something please put the fire out!"She had a extreme
amount of panick in her voice."Hey look!Help that girl!There's a fire!"Some
elderly man screamed to the people on the bustling,paved streets.People then
rushed over to the burning house and began to put the fire out with water and
sand.After about five hours,they finally put it out.Anne was suprised it had not
spread and burnt all of Savannah.Suddenly Anne saw Diego rush over to her and he
began to question her."What happened?I heard it all!"Diego said sounding breathless.
Anne began to explain."On my way home,as I was walking,I heard a deafening
scream.It came from Mrs.Thomas' house!I'm pretty sure it was her.Then I wen't
inside to see if she was alright,and when I wen't in,there was broken glass,things
were stolen,and I wen't upstairs and Mrs.Thomas was dead!She'd looked as she'd
been knocked out.I searched for her children,but they had vanished!Then,as I wen't
to go get help,I saw someone in the hallway upstairs,and they had a trail of oil
running through the house,he or she lit a match,and kaboom!The house caught on
fire!I barely escaped my death!I don't know what to do!"She replied brethlessly
and sadly.
"I wonder what they wanted.Maybe there was something valuable in her house that
they found out about.Maybe precious jewels or gold."Diego said with a look of wonder
and awe upon his face."I don't know,but whatever it was,wev'e got to find
it and the children.Only all the clues and evidence remained in the house,and well,
it's burnt.What are we gonna do?"Anne replied feeling discouraged.
All of the sudden,a significant looking letter blew out from under the ashes of
the remains of Mrs.Thomas and her burnt home.It was crisply burnt around the
edges.Anne picked it up and read it.It read:Go to the Colorado Mountains at Devil's
cavern on February 11 if you wan't to live.Bring the gold and jewels or else.For the
sake of your safety,and your children's safety."Oh my Gosh.Diego,take a look at
this letter."Anne said.Diego stared at the paper for what seemed like hours."We
need a plan.We need to go to the Colorado Mountains at Devil's cavern to look for
clues.There may be some.It might help us to find the children.And now we know
what they wanted."Diego said confidently.
"So,well what's your genius plan?"Asked Anne sarcastically."Tommorow morning,
you and I can take off and make our way to Devil's cavern in Colorado.Be sure to
pack anything you'll need.And prepare to become a professional hitchhiker.Cause
that's mostly the way we will make our way there.It's quite an extreme ways off,
but it's worth the try.Go ahead and bring a small wagon and suitecase to bring
your possessions."Diego said advisedly."But,you do realize that Eloise is going to
wonder where in the heck I am."Anne said reminding him."Oh you are right.
I hate to say this,but maybe should not come,Anne."Diego said sadly."No,don't
think like that Diego.I don't wan't you to go alone.It's not safe.You could get killed.
And well,if my best friend go's down,i'm going down with him.Even if I get a thousand
whippings when I get back.I just wan't you to be safe,Diego."Anne said soothingly.
She smiled at him.He smiled back."You won't need to have any whippings,because
that witch won't come even three feet near you with me in the way."Diego said it like
he was a prince on a white horse.Anne turned as red as a tomato.She was really
starting to like Diego.Diego must have realized she had a crush on him because he
blushed too.Then the most unexpected thing happened.He kissed Anne on the cheek!
Anne almost fainted.Then Diego broke the awkward silence."Just,be careful when
you sneek out in the middle of the night.Meet me at my house at twelve-thirty
tonight.
On her way home,she heard someone scream dreadfully and she turned left and
right over her shoulders too see where it came from.She saw where it was coming
from.Mrs.Thomas'home!She quikly tied the cows to a luckily nearby tree,And
rushed into the house and called for Mrs.Thomas.
"Mrs.Thomas?!Are you alright?"She called.Then there was a sudden silence in the
house.She called again."Mrs.Thomas?!"Still no answer.She suddenly noticed that
broken glass lay everywere and things were out of place.She also noticed that some
things were stolen.How'd she know that?Because she always ran errands for
Mrs.Thomas and was always coming inside her house!She then rushed upstairs.
And found Mrs.Thomas laying on the floor almost unconcious.Or so Anne thought.
She checked for pulse.No.No pulse.Mrs.Thomas was dead!Someone killed her!Anne
ran out of the room with a look of horror on her face.She searched the house for
Mrs.Thomas' children.No sign of them.They must have been kidnapped!
Anne was just about to run out and get help when she saw a shadowy figure
in the hallway,staring at her.She could not make out the features of the person
because of the darkness.Suddenly,the misteryous figure lit a match,and put it
on a trail of oil they set there purposly,and a fire started!The shadowy figure
quikly escaped through a window by smashing the glass and being lowered by
a rope.Anne had to get out quik before the fire consumed her.She quikly looked
for an escape.She ran downstairs and tried to go for the front door.Nope.It was
burning in flames.Then she remembered a secret door in the lower cabinets in
the kitchen that led out of the house.She made an attempted escape toward it.
Luckily,it was not consumed by fire.She slammed the cabinets open quikly as
possible,then pushed herself out with such great force,that she stumbled down
into the mud and scraped her arm badly.Then she hurredly ran towards the
front of the house upon the street and began to scream for help."Help!Fire!
Mrs.Thomas is dead and her children were kidnapped!Help!Somebody please!
Get some water or sand or something please put the fire out!"She had a extreme
amount of panick in her voice."Hey look!Help that girl!There's a fire!"Some
elderly man screamed to the people on the bustling,paved streets.People then
rushed over to the burning house and began to put the fire out with water and
sand.After about five hours,they finally put it out.Anne was suprised it had not
spread and burnt all of Savannah.Suddenly Anne saw Diego rush over to her and he
began to question her."What happened?I heard it all!"Diego said sounding breathless.
Anne began to explain."On my way home,as I was walking,I heard a deafening
scream.It came from Mrs.Thomas' house!I'm pretty sure it was her.Then I wen't
inside to see if she was alright,and when I wen't in,there was broken glass,things
were stolen,and I wen't upstairs and Mrs.Thomas was dead!She'd looked as she'd
been knocked out.I searched for her children,but they had vanished!Then,as I wen't
to go get help,I saw someone in the hallway upstairs,and they had a trail of oil
running through the house,he or she lit a match,and kaboom!The house caught on
fire!I barely escaped my death!I don't know what to do!"She replied brethlessly
and sadly.
"I wonder what they wanted.Maybe there was something valuable in her house that
they found out about.Maybe precious jewels or gold."Diego said with a look of wonder
and awe upon his face."I don't know,but whatever it was,wev'e got to find
it and the children.Only all the clues and evidence remained in the house,and well,
it's burnt.What are we gonna do?"Anne replied feeling discouraged.
All of the sudden,a significant looking letter blew out from under the ashes of
the remains of Mrs.Thomas and her burnt home.It was crisply burnt around the
edges.Anne picked it up and read it.It read:Go to the Colorado Mountains at Devil's
cavern on February 11 if you wan't to live.Bring the gold and jewels or else.For the
sake of your safety,and your children's safety."Oh my Gosh.Diego,take a look at
this letter."Anne said.Diego stared at the paper for what seemed like hours."We
need a plan.We need to go to the Colorado Mountains at Devil's cavern to look for
clues.There may be some.It might help us to find the children.And now we know
what they wanted."Diego said confidently.
"So,well what's your genius plan?"Asked Anne sarcastically."Tommorow morning,
you and I can take off and make our way to Devil's cavern in Colorado.Be sure to
pack anything you'll need.And prepare to become a professional hitchhiker.Cause
that's mostly the way we will make our way there.It's quite an extreme ways off,
but it's worth the try.Go ahead and bring a small wagon and suitecase to bring
your possessions."Diego said advisedly."But,you do realize that Eloise is going to
wonder where in the heck I am."Anne said reminding him."Oh you are right.
I hate to say this,but maybe should not come,Anne."Diego said sadly."No,don't
think like that Diego.I don't wan't you to go alone.It's not safe.You could get killed.
And well,if my best friend go's down,i'm going down with him.Even if I get a thousand
whippings when I get back.I just wan't you to be safe,Diego."Anne said soothingly.
She smiled at him.He smiled back."You won't need to have any whippings,because
that witch won't come even three feet near you with me in the way."Diego said it like
he was a prince on a white horse.Anne turned as red as a tomato.She was really
starting to like Diego.Diego must have realized she had a crush on him because he
blushed too.Then the most unexpected thing happened.He kissed Anne on the cheek!
Anne almost fainted.Then Diego broke the awkward silence."Just,be careful when
you sneek out in the middle of the night.Meet me at my house at twelve-thirty
tonight.
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Chapter three:Journey to Colorado
Anne began to walk home,thinking of how unsual her day had been.It had been
one thing after another lately,and it seemed as life was trying to finish her off.She
had to act quikly and secretly when she got home and packed her things for the
trip.Amazing as this was,the family always wen't to bed at nine o'clock.This would
give Anne plenty of time to pack.She would have to be secret,and if anyone caught
her,she would have to make up a clever lie for coverup.Anne suddenly reached the
large victorian mansion and got to work.
She had to make dinner for the family.Anne smiled at the thought that this was
actually her last meal preperation for the family.She had the widest grin on her
face.She would never have to slave over a hot stove for these brats.But,since it
was the last,she decided to make it special.But it had to be quik and simple,yet
delicious.Her family were like her food critics.If something didn't taste good,they
would let her know,in a very rude manner!She thought for a moment of what to
cook,then an idea of a very simple delicacy popped into her mind.Macaroni and
cheese,mashed potatoes and gravy,and gritz!It was a favorite here in Savannah,
and it did not take to long to make.It would take up some time,but not all the time
she needed to pack up.Anne pulled the large,heavy doors to the mansion open.It
was suprisingly unlocked.She took a step into the ballroom they always had parties
invited to,and wen't through some small,hidden doors in the back of the ballroom,
and entered the kitchen.
Anne began to walk home,thinking of how unsual her day had been.It had been
one thing after another lately,and it seemed as life was trying to finish her off.She
had to act quikly and secretly when she got home and packed her things for the
trip.Amazing as this was,the family always wen't to bed at nine o'clock.This would
give Anne plenty of time to pack.She would have to be secret,and if anyone caught
her,she would have to make up a clever lie for coverup.Anne suddenly reached the
large victorian mansion and got to work.
She had to make dinner for the family.Anne smiled at the thought that this was
actually her last meal preperation for the family.She had the widest grin on her
face.She would never have to slave over a hot stove for these brats.But,since it
was the last,she decided to make it special.But it had to be quik and simple,yet
delicious.Her family were like her food critics.If something didn't taste good,they
would let her know,in a very rude manner!She thought for a moment of what to
cook,then an idea of a very simple delicacy popped into her mind.Macaroni and
cheese,mashed potatoes and gravy,and gritz!It was a favorite here in Savannah,
and it did not take to long to make.It would take up some time,but not all the time
she needed to pack up.Anne pulled the large,heavy doors to the mansion open.It
was suprisingly unlocked.She took a step into the ballroom they always had parties
invited to,and wen't through some small,hidden doors in the back of the ballroom,
and entered the kitchen.
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Now,remember,that I am only 13 years old,so some of my informaion in the stories maybe incorrect.Of course these books are fiction.But,I must have all information correct. I will post more on these books soon.Let me know if I can improve.
I will post more on these books soon.Let me know if I can improve.
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alrighty...not bad. But here are my opinions:
There are several places where you just come straight out and tell the reader what this character is like. I personally cannot stand that. And adding some more emotion to it would be nice too. I can't feel as if I relate to any of your characters--there isn't anybody that I really want to suceed.
And of course take anything I say to you as a suggestion--it's your story, do what you want with it. Just some advice (hopefully helpful).
There are several places where you just come straight out and tell the reader what this character is like. I personally cannot stand that. And adding some more emotion to it would be nice too. I can't feel as if I relate to any of your characters--there isn't anybody that I really want to suceed.
And of course take anything I say to you as a suggestion--it's your story, do what you want with it. Just some advice (hopefully helpful).
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Well,the first story is about Nancy Drew.I didn't make her up.I'm sure youv'e heard of her.The second,I made it up.It takes place in the late 1700's.Tariel said:
But like I said,i'm only 13,so everything I write may not be perfect and may take some time to correct.
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I've barely heard of her. I think you wrote the story assuming that your reader had heard of her and knew a bit about her, and therefore didn't explain much. That's how it seems anyway. Practice desribing an unoriginal character as if the reader had never heard of him/her before. It's a great way to develop your skills and learn to describe an original character much more effectively.Ice_Princess said:Well,the first story is about Nancy Drew.I didn't make her up.I'm sure youv'e heard of her.The second,I made it up.It takes place in the late 1700's.
Oh, and just a tip--NEVER use your age as an excuse for your writing. Not while talking to others, and epecially not in your own mind. Actually, you should never need to make excuses for your writing ever. Trust me, it can save you a LOT of effort if you can get over the need to justify every comment made about your writing that isn't, "Oh, isn't that wodnerful!"
I've tried justifying myself--but really you grow much better if you take criticism and go
Please forgive me if I sound harsh. I do not been to be negitive. Just remember that this is YOUR story. People can say whatever they like about it, but in the end it all comes down to your own opinions. You can agree with a comment, change it, and perhaps transform your work. Or you can disagree with a comment, change nothing, and still be satisfied. You know your intentions for this story better than ANYBODY. So be honest with yourself, decide where you need to work, don't be afraid to ask for help, and write write write!! Don't let anybody force you to conform your story...do what feels right to you
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Tariel said:I've barely heard of her. I think you wrote the story assuming that your reader had heard of her and knew a bit about her, and therefore didn't explain much. That's how it seems anyway. Practice desribing an unoriginal character as if the reader had never heard of him/her before. It's a great way to develop your skills and learn to describe an original character much more effectively.
Oh, and just a tip--NEVER use your age as an excuse for your writing. Not while talking to others, and epecially not in your own mind. Actually, you should never need to make excuses for your writing ever. Trust me, it can save you a LOT of effort if you can get over the need to justify every comment made about your writing that isn't, "Oh, isn't that wodnerful!"
I've tried justifying myself--but really you grow much better if you take criticism and go
Please forgive me if I sound harsh. I do not been to be negitive. Just remember that this is YOUR story. People can say whatever they like about it, but in the end it all comes down to your own opinions. You can agree with a comment, change it, and perhaps transform your work. Or you can disagree with a comment, change nothing, and still be satisfied. You know your intentions for this story better than ANYBODY. So be honest with yourself, decide where you need to work, don't be afraid to ask for help, and write write write!! Don't let anybody force you to conform your story...do what feels right to you
Well,the Nancy Drew book started out writing it for the Nancy Drew message board.But I copied,pasted it in my notebook,and am continuing to write it.That's because I deleted my account on the message board.Nancy Drew was a character invented in the 1930's I believe.She is a amatuer girl detective,and solves alot of mysteries.I also play the Nancy Drew computer games and read the books.Go to nancydrewgames.com and you can find out a little bit about Nancy Drew.
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hey...I read a few when I was younger! I'm not THAT cluelessIce_Princess said:Well,the Nancy Drew book started out writing it for the Nancy Drew message board.But I copied,pasted it in my notebook,and am continuing to write it.That's because I deleted my account on the message board.Nancy Drew was a character invented in the 1930's I believe.She is a amatuer girl detective,and solves alot of mysteries.I also play the Nancy Drew computer games and read the books.Go to nancydrewgames.com and you can find out a little bit about Nancy Drew.
Just wanted to let you know that the fact that she is a well known character doesn't excuse you from needing to introduce her like you would any other character
but of course, if you are writing for no other eyes but your own, you can do whatever you want
Actually, you can do whatever you want anyway...but you might want to keep your reader in mind
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I think its very sweet that you're writing two books at once. Just remember if you have what you think is writer's block or lack of inspiration, it means that your inner self, your soul, wants you to be patient so as for it to ferment your ideas and bring them to fruition. Don't give up hope that you can get your work published someday. The publishing climate may someday change where people will be more accepting of beginner's work, and will realize whose work is actually good instead of just throwing everything they receive away.
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