I think that this version of the Gospel is very watered down, I accept all what you have written however, its important, What you have put in your presentation is a typical worldly sales technique. offering people a Quick ticket to heaven, the Gospel is more than this its about bringing Gods kindom to the whole world and Gods kingdom is about bringing spiritual, emotional, physical, healing to this troubled world.
Following Jesus is more than saying a few words, its an action, of love and committment to God. i didn't hear you mention to people that they may suffer for the sake of Gods gospel reason being we paint being a christian and knowing God in a rosey way when in reality it can be worst.
I think followers of Jesus should count conversations rather than conversions.
Please don't get me wrong i Love the Lord Jesus and he is central to whole theme of the bible. I think we should introduce people to the character of Jesus, His love, compassion, committment, selflesness, strength, controversy, and every other characteristic, i say this because that's Gods goal is to make us more and more like Jesus, Jesus didn't go around telling people to believe in him did he now but people wanted to follow him through listening to him, seeing him helping people, and seeing him defending people etc. shouldn't we be doing the same shouldn't we be presenting Jesus in a more practicle way rather than the A B C to heaven
God Bless you all in christ
Nicky