Just Wrote This

dude, anyone who writes a poem is a poet! nice work

Ah, so basically, don't say anything bad about it

It's a good poem. It's well written. I honestly couldn't write a poem to save my life.

i agree, called, nicely done phleace.

Phleace, I am going to be brutally honest.

This is less a 'poem' and more a long peice of disjointed prose.
In fact it reads far more suited to a diary than a poem.

I do, however, respect that applying ones thoughts and musings to paper will help one to focus.
In that case I hope it helped you; you are the intended audience if such was your intention.

However, as far as a literary work, it lacks style and originality.

If you want further critique of this poem in literary sense, I by no means belittle the emotional context or the validity of it as a personal vent, I can do so, but I will refrain from such now.

Phleace said:

Ouch.

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ouch?

I do apollogise for the hurt to your feelings.
However: blind praise for a work will have you assuming that it is a perfect thing, without flaw, spot or wrinkle.
It is important that anyone who wishes to grow as a writer, be it poetic or otherwise, should not only accept critical (not cold hearted - critical) reviews from whomever will extend their mind to the task but should seek it actively.

Mothers are for blind praise, to comfort and make you feel good. Peers are there to provide critique, to make you do better and grow.

Remember that our beloved bibles admonish us to accept correction (critiques are the road to it) and to turn not from a critical view.

I certainly hope you can use what I have said to help you to see the flaws that you may be spurned on to greater heights - better works.

And then on to help others.

So long as it served it's purpose, you are justified.