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Martyr's Crown

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"Ser Libre"

Quiero mover como el viento,
suavemente entre los arboles.
Estirarme hacia el cielo,
lleno de alegria.

Correr por el camino,
entre la hierba y entre las flores.
Trepar con gran emocion,
sintiendome como una niña de nuevo.

Libre de ser mi misma,
nadie que me juzgue.
Cantar desde las profundidades de mi corazon,
bailando con pasión y soltarme sin nada que me estorba.

Gritar con fuerza hasta las nubes,
dando vueltas por el campo.
Saltando sobre piedras en pequeños ríos,
poder estar sola con mis pensamientos.

Llorando cuando me sienta triste,
dejar que la naturaleza y Dios me consuelan.
Mis lagrimas van cayendo sobre mi cara,
sacandome el dolor que llevo por dentro.

Reírme cuando me sienta feliz,
escribiendo mis sentimientos en el agua.
Leer el olor del aire que me rodea,
tocar las palabras que salen del corazon.

Solamente quiero ser libre,
que mi alma pueda volar como un pajaro.
Mas y mas arriba hacia el cielo encima,
donde vive Dios y sus angeles.

De: Crowned Princess.
 
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faroukfarouk

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Very good!

(Maybe at the end of verse 3, '...sin nada que me estorbe'.)
 
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Very good!

(Maybe at the end of verse 3, '...sin nada que me estorbe'.)

Thank you!

Also thanks for the "correction" part, there might be a few mistakes done. I wrote the poem yesterday, and I haven't been writing much spanish poems for a while now. But it felt good to try it out again. I just need to check out words and the way sentences can be written, even though if I most of the time am right about it, but I still want to make sure I do it right. I can still make mistakes too, though.

I think both ways can be written "sin nada que me estorba" & "sin nada que me estorbe", or not?
 
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Probably, but I thought you would want to follow the subjunctive form you already used in line 2 of the same verse: 'juzgue'.

So where did you learn Spanish?
 
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Probably, but I thought you would want to follow the subjunctive form you already used in line 2 of the same verse: 'juzgue'.

So where did you learn Spanish?

My mother is spanish so it was talked a lot at home when me and my sisters were children, our mother thought it was important teaching us spanish from an early age. Also the spanish tv-channel was on a lot at home, and then we went twice every year on vacation to Spain visiting family and friends over there.
 
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Gracias por compartir tu poema, Crowned Princess. Es hermoso. ¿Puedo compartirlo con mi familia?
 
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