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Day 1: The Portal
Dante woke up early in the morning, groggy and lazy. He had just started yesterday at his new intern job at a scientific factory in Craig, Colorado. His employer was one by the name of Dr. Ramiero Ozerkov, a german scientist who had been ridiculed at the National Science Confederation when he presented his theory. A part of his theory gad been that there were elementary particles that could be smashed into oblivion. And when this happened, a rift into a new world would open similar to Earth but with a more diverse society there. Obviously, he was kicked out and banned from the Confederation until he had more proof than just his words and paperwork. Angered by this, Ramiero begun once again on his theory and tried to make it into reality. That is when he realized he could not do it alone. So he posted an ad in the newspaper about a scientific helper being wanted, pay being $24.50 an hour if the work is done properly, and bed and food is provided. Dante took up the offer right away, for even if he did hate science, he was always the best in his class.
"Now then," said Ramiero, "I want you to combine those two chemicals to make a pure substance that will meld together the electrons in this particle with the neutrons of a noble gas. And when this occurs, it should create an explosion. This explosion is not one that will create a mushroom cloud, but will hopefully create a rift in the Time-Space Continuum. And if that does work, come get me and we will set up for our journey into the portal!" Ramiero's face was old and crinkled. His age was obviuosly over 60: he has whitened hair that hang to his shoulders, his back arched over with age all the time, his hands were wrikled and folded over many times their shape was not distinct, but his eyes betrayed him. They held a fire blazing with a youth's curiosity of life and what is in it, always going this way and that to scan everything. This is one of the reasons why Dante had accepted the job. He liked how the old man never acted his age, scientist or no.
"Yassir. I'll get on it after I brush up and eat something. Can't start a day without energy, ya know." Dante sluggishly left his room, dragging his feet to the restroom to do his morning thing. After cleaning up and running cold water and splashing it on his face to wake himself a bit, Dante went down for a bite of breakfast. Being a jack-of -all-trades, but being best at the trade of science, he whipped himself up some scrambled eggs, some ham, and a slice of toast with strawberry jam on it. As he sat to eat, he realized he had not yet changed out of his clothes. He left his food to cool down to change. A black shirt and white dress shirt worn as a flannel, a pair of jeans, and his favorite necklace (an arrowhead carved from stone and was colored like blue and white marble, but the tip of it broke off) were a few of the things he wore everyday, or at all. He looked at himself in the mirror and liked what he saw. Dante was 18, just graduated highschool, had a slender build but firm muscles, was fairly tall for his age, and had brown eyes and black hair that hung to the bottom of his ears. and was streaked with brown highlights. He walked down the steps, taking his time to think about what Ramiero said, which he had mostly forgotten. But of course the scientist had put a note in his jean pocket, where he always get reminders. Finishing his breakfast and leaving the plate in the sink, he set off to the labs.
He picked up the vial labeled with EPX, which meant elementary particle x (for x is what Ramiero labels anything he doesn't know the real name for) and the noble gas Argon. He tested the strengths of the bonds the electrons had with the electrons with the gas. After getting nothing, he tried it with the protons. Immediately the magnifying implement he had used started to melt into a small puddle. He withdrew his hands fast, and got the particle and gas out before they too either got covered in melting ooze or exploded. He reminded himself not to mix electrons with protons, and got to work wiht the neutrons. As soon as he got them to mix, a blinding light seared out of a small slit that seemed to have come out of nowhere. He took of his goggles that multiplied the light's brightness and coverdd his eyes with both arms. A sudden explosion pelted him with light. Though he could not feel it, he could see the light sticking to his skin and seeping through his clothed for a grab onto flesh. He was shocked and had to take a while to collect himself. After a while more of blinding light, Ramiero came running in to find Dante glowing in the solid light force.
"DANTE! THIS IS AMAZING! I have tried so many times to do this and have failed but you.....You have suceeded and are now covered in the results of that sucess! Rejoice Dante, for you are the first to go into this rift!" His shouts and laughter scared Dante a bit, and the light started to fade. But Dante's fear diminished, and so did the dimming. The rift he created had a negative effect on Ramiero shocking him every time he tried to touch it. When Dante reached out, his hand slipped through it and sent a tingling sensation into his body. He pushed further and was at last pulled into the impatience of a world that wanted to be explored.
Day 2: Yet to come
....Spellcheck done, I am finished.
MORE REVISIONS DONE! YAY!
Day 1: The Portal
Dante woke up early in the morning, groggy and lazy. He had just started yesterday at his new intern job at a scientific factory in Craig, Colorado. His employer was one by the name of Dr. Ramiero Ozerkov, a german scientist who had been ridiculed at the National Science Confederation when he presented his theory. A part of his theory gad been that there were elementary particles that could be smashed into oblivion. And when this happened, a rift into a new world would open similar to Earth but with a more diverse society there. Obviously, he was kicked out and banned from the Confederation until he had more proof than just his words and paperwork. Angered by this, Ramiero begun once again on his theory and tried to make it into reality. That is when he realized he could not do it alone. So he posted an ad in the newspaper about a scientific helper being wanted, pay being $24.50 an hour if the work is done properly, and bed and food is provided. Dante took up the offer right away, for even if he did hate science, he was always the best in his class.
"Now then," said Ramiero, "I want you to combine those two chemicals to make a pure substance that will meld together the electrons in this particle with the neutrons of a noble gas. And when this occurs, it should create an explosion. This explosion is not one that will create a mushroom cloud, but will hopefully create a rift in the Time-Space Continuum. And if that does work, come get me and we will set up for our journey into the portal!" Ramiero's face was old and crinkled. His age was obviuosly over 60: he has whitened hair that hang to his shoulders, his back arched over with age all the time, his hands were wrikled and folded over many times their shape was not distinct, but his eyes betrayed him. They held a fire blazing with a youth's curiosity of life and what is in it, always going this way and that to scan everything. This is one of the reasons why Dante had accepted the job. He liked how the old man never acted his age, scientist or no.
"Yassir. I'll get on it after I brush up and eat something. Can't start a day without energy, ya know." Dante sluggishly left his room, dragging his feet to the restroom to do his morning thing. After cleaning up and running cold water and splashing it on his face to wake himself a bit, Dante went down for a bite of breakfast. Being a jack-of -all-trades, but being best at the trade of science, he whipped himself up some scrambled eggs, some ham, and a slice of toast with strawberry jam on it. As he sat to eat, he realized he had not yet changed out of his clothes. He left his food to cool down to change. A black shirt and white dress shirt worn as a flannel, a pair of jeans, and his favorite necklace (an arrowhead carved from stone and was colored like blue and white marble, but the tip of it broke off) were a few of the things he wore everyday, or at all. He looked at himself in the mirror and liked what he saw. Dante was 18, just graduated highschool, had a slender build but firm muscles, was fairly tall for his age, and had brown eyes and black hair that hung to the bottom of his ears. and was streaked with brown highlights. He walked down the steps, taking his time to think about what Ramiero said, which he had mostly forgotten. But of course the scientist had put a note in his jean pocket, where he always get reminders. Finishing his breakfast and leaving the plate in the sink, he set off to the labs.
He picked up the vial labeled with EPX, which meant elementary particle x (for x is what Ramiero labels anything he doesn't know the real name for) and the noble gas Argon. He tested the strengths of the bonds the electrons had with the electrons with the gas. After getting nothing, he tried it with the protons. Immediately the magnifying implement he had used started to melt into a small puddle. He withdrew his hands fast, and got the particle and gas out before they too either got covered in melting ooze or exploded. He reminded himself not to mix electrons with protons, and got to work wiht the neutrons. As soon as he got them to mix, a blinding light seared out of a small slit that seemed to have come out of nowhere. He took of his goggles that multiplied the light's brightness and coverdd his eyes with both arms. A sudden explosion pelted him with light. Though he could not feel it, he could see the light sticking to his skin and seeping through his clothed for a grab onto flesh. He was shocked and had to take a while to collect himself. After a while more of blinding light, Ramiero came running in to find Dante glowing in the solid light force.
"DANTE! THIS IS AMAZING! I have tried so many times to do this and have failed but you.....You have suceeded and are now covered in the results of that sucess! Rejoice Dante, for you are the first to go into this rift!" His shouts and laughter scared Dante a bit, and the light started to fade. But Dante's fear diminished, and so did the dimming. The rift he created had a negative effect on Ramiero shocking him every time he tried to touch it. When Dante reached out, his hand slipped through it and sent a tingling sensation into his body. He pushed further and was at last pulled into the impatience of a world that wanted to be explored.
Day 2: Yet to come
....Spellcheck done, I am finished.
MORE REVISIONS DONE! YAY!