My Poem, comments please

well, i personally love any poetry that i don't write i'm just not good with words. i loved your poem. one question, was it supposed to rhyme or is it just a prose sort of thing?

Interesting. I liked the imagery.

I could imagine those hooves, bees, and that crowd.

I can just imagine the bees too.... I got chills, I get stung, i die....
Nice allergy to have huh ?
I liked the prose to, Have you tried to write something that rhymes ?
It is harder than it looks......Post another one soon if you can...

Crazy4Christ, You have done a good job here with your imagery, but especially your message, that nothing is going to come between you and your Lord. For those that love poetry, it does not necessarily have to rhyme, this is a free verse poem. What makes it different from prose? It is the imagery, the ability to get a message across in a few lines. Believe it or not, free verse it often harder to do than rhyming, because if you are not careful it becomes prose. You did a good job with this. Dee

Great imagery! I could feel a dark battle going on and the brilliant victory at the end! The pounding, the pain, the roar of the angry crowd, all faced and overcome in the quest to be with your Lord! Cool!

I agree with Dee. Very nice work. I liked it!

Thank you for your poem, it made me think of Romans 8:31
"What then shall we say to these things? If God is for us, who can be against us?"

i thank its great really inspired me i am to a writer