a christian rock song i wrote...

here it is, tell me what you think

For You

If you suddenly needed me
To change to something harder to be
I wouldn't pause or look behind
Wouldn't need a confirming sign

I'd carry on cause I'm not fond
Of denying, or anything that could hurt you some
I wouldn't do anything that could hurt you some

And I would change me life if you wanted me to
I would deny anything just for you
I would follow you now if I just knew how
I'd turn myself around only for you

If you suddenly needed me
To look around and say what I see
I wouldn't stop till I was done
Just obeying you makes my body numb

And I would change me life if you wanted me to
I would deny anything just for you
I would follow you now if I just knew how
I'd turn myself around only for you

Yeah, I'd obey you and wouldn't ask why
It's not my place to question you
And if you said to say my goodbyes
I'd leave everyone just for you
I'd leave everyone cause you wanted me to

And I would change me life if you wanted me to
I would deny anything just for you
I would follow you now if I just knew how
I'd turn myself around only for you

And I would change me life if you wanted me to
I would deny anything just for you
I would follow you now if I just knew how
I'd turn myself around only for you
 

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Thanks for posting and sharing your song with us. Do you write the music for the words also? It is hard to sort lines without the music. I would suggest, the second line may flow more smoothly as, to change all that I used to be, or in another context, to be what you want me to be. Please don't take this as a criticisim, I just thought the line , to change to something harder to be, was a little out of rhythm with the other lines in that stanza. Of course I cannot hear the music that goes with the lines, I was just reading it as poetic lyrics, and with the music that line may work just as well. Just a comment, as you asked what do you think.
 
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