Recent content by Silver Saint

I am always thinking about things that I have planned in the books I write, but I'm never sure what kind of scene will happen in which book. I have things in the book that I'm writing that I came up with intending to be used with something else but can't now. The inverse is also true, taking...

I do not mean to break in unannounced with contradiction, but I had to make my thoughts known. The vampires we all grew up with, while entertaining, are not scripturally sound creatures at all; they cannot exist. This fact alone is the biggest turn off for me any time they're involved with...

When I started reading, I was building up ammo for a critique when I was done, but the work definitely redeems itself. The only thing I'd really change, Punctuation and line breaks that flow with the verse. Good verse, good message, but it will lose much of its effectiveness without those...

Very unfortunate. Very sad. Well written though it was, it was a difficult read. Truly, you bear a great burden. One that many can hardly understand, let alone relate to. Know that I know how you feel. That's worth something, I think. The only thing I can think else to say is that your...

Ditto. Important message. Important indeed in this day. Go with God. I am aware, Isacc

I liked the imagery in this one. However, I have to ask, is your poetry all dark? Not that I mind, but I hope that there is more to your life than the world you paint so well. Even if it is only in your deepest heart, the light should have a place somewhere. Go with God. I am aware...

Should this verse be true, I am profoundly sorry. If it is not, it scertainly an origional piece. In terms of wording, you may want to break a paragraph a few places. You kept your rhythem in tact for the most part, but when you went over or under, it stood out. Also, writing numbers looks...

As usual, a choice verse, Sonya. A most beautiful bittersweet and one that I can relate to more than I'd like. Your imagery is very dark, very crisp, the kind of stillness and sterility that can translate to your soul. You're flow was good, and I'm sure that what stutterings I had were my fault...

Love and sex and pride to sever, Cutting deeper, bleeding never, Living tandem, Chasing heated, Written, read it, cold and clever Well, firstly, I'd like to thank you for you praise. I really don't know whatelse to say than that. I'll explain myself as best I can. I'm...

You are dead on, One Son. I could talk about Imagery all day, but for now I'll stick to the technical. The third line of the first verse bears much significance to a book I'm writing. Unfortunately, I'm not to that particular point, so anything other than a poorly organized, long winded...

I don't normally do hiakus, but I liked this one. I saw myself as the brook, and the storm being God's purpose for me, greater than I am prepared to accept. I wonder what you inteded in writing it. It struck me as well that you said, 'storm' and not 'rain'. Good job. Go with God. I am...

Amen indeed. It was my impression that it got stronger as it went on. I like it. Go with God. I am aware, Isacc

To be honest, I am at a loss as the the purpose of such a forum. Now, I write my future wife often enough. However, it is hard to do so, being such a private and intimate thing, I'm very hesitant to put my thoughts in a position where they may be read. The same could be said of a verse to...

Welcome back, One Son. I remember you, sure enough. I'd been wondering where you'd gotten to. I liked your poem. Very good. In the second verse, the only thing I thought to change was the phrase 'Soul set free, pure and white, weightless cloud'. Saying 'white' then 'weightless doesn't flow very...

Come now, Quix, there's no such thing. In regards to the poem, I liked it. Well written, but I didn't get much feeling of closure. That may be intentional, to go with the excited feeling of the poem, I don't know. I agree that reading quickly helps too. Good job. Go with God. I am...